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    dots Submission Name: Love, the resurected flame.dots
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    Author: Wolfeye_666
    ASL Info:    14/M/Canada
    Elite Ratio:    6.53 - 140/112/21
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 254
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    Description:
       This is my love life continuing.


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    dotsLove, the resurected flame.dots
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    The flame resurrected,
    After a couple of months it shows existence,
    Why,
    Not a soul knows,
    Is it because the love might be on both sides?
    We will know when?
    When the bell will ring,
    So for now lets wish,
    And beg,
    Cause love is back,
    Will it stay long?
    We will know when a second bell will ring,
    If the first one doesn’t show up,
    The second must withdraw,
    This is love life,
    Complex,
    And every so often
    Just no sense,




    Submitted on 2005-09-14 17:57:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This was pretty good...but I expect nothing less of you...you're becoming an amazing writer- ur an amazing writer:) I really liked what you were expressing here but I Think if you went into further detail then you would entrance the reader with your words...making them part of your imagry...as if they are right there. I also think that instead of a free verse this might have been better if it ryhmed. but overall this was an awesome write and you really are good at writing love poems...I wrote some but they're not that good...there's always pain behind mine.
    love and peace.
    | Posted on 2006-02-11 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      you are getting so much better. ;)

    i really liked how honest this was. these were your feelings.
    the only thing i would suggest is many working on your flow a little bit.
    but your wording and discriptions are just really good. the feelings were really raw almost, they were just out there. and i liked that alot. these feelings are something i think everyone can relate to.

    your ganna pass me up one of these days ;)

    keep working hard as i know you will!!!
    ~jennifer
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by joy7542 | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmmm! not my most favortie piece, but it really doesn't matter what i think if you are expressing yourself in the way that you desire to, so continue writing, you should first and foremost write for yourself, otherwise no one else will get into what you are doing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]



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