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Submission Name: Piano keys dots

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Author:	AmandaLyn
ASL Info:	18/F/ Centralia
Elite Ratio:	3.59 - 292/292/42
Words:	77

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	214
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
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Description:
yeah... i dunno tell me what you thought.. it was my shot at a something a little abstract.. with a dual/ hidden meaning....

Piano keys dots

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I sit down and these ivory keys
just stare back at me.

Silky and smooth,
black and white.

I close my eyes, and hear a melody
and my fingers caress the piano.

Up and down,
floating and dancing.

The notes are like a mystery
I don't know what I'm doing next.

Playing and smiling,
emotions and music.

The melody kisses my ears
and gives laughter to my soul.

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  I see you have people guessing about your hidden meaning,lol One might think that the different colour keys represent joy between two races, like music itself,it just flows naturally and feel great.

Sensuality should always feel effortless and sincere.

The poem was a joy to read and soothing,while letting your mystery answer your question with how they feel on the subject.

excellent poem
| Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by edthepoet | [ Reply to This ]
  I disagree with the comment by "the weird eel", in the fact I think there is definitely not a relation to "making music" as he/she put it.

I sense what I think any muscician feels when they sit at their instrument of choice. When you have nothing in paticular to play, and you just play everything and nothing at all. When you get lost in the chords and the notes sweep you off your feet. You can't do anything but smile. To me, the line "The melody kisses my ears
and gives laughter to my soul" was very relative and personal, because I have such a wonderful time inventing music and it's sweet to my ears. But I often find myself laughing at myself when I make a mistake. I love the originality of the piece. Awesome work, Amanda. Talk to you later!

~Amber (ToGodBtru from MR)
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Amberkins | [ Reply to This ]
  even thought the keys are two different colors if just right it can make great music. even though the two are different in what other/ attitude,color, background whatever. the two can get along just fine once yall know what makes each other happy.
is that the message?
peace and let me know
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by dudethis | [ Reply to This ]
  The mere simplicity of the piece makes it great.

The uncertainty and awkwardness at this part made a shift in gear going for the climax. Brilliant!
“The notes are like a mystery
I don't know what I'm doing next”

Short and simple. Kinda makes me want to write a guitar version of this piece entitled “Guitar Strings,”

Not to mention that it might also have a dual/ hidden meaning in it.

Resonate the music,
WakeTheDead
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by wakethedead | [ Reply to This ]
  abstract.. deifinately. understandable.. depends on the reader's interpretation, which is good i suppose. there is nothing wrong with this one as far as i can see. at heart, it seems sensual, so the appearance of the word "soul" is almost out of place, but that is uniquely cool..
worth reading..
nice work :)
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Shawnothan | [ Reply to This ]
  i love this , beautiful, i love the way you used the piano as a double meaning, "the piano kisses my ears and give laughter to my soul" i love it because i know the way that hearing a melody can make you feel and its kind of like being with the person you love...beautiful, keep writing

<3 adalae
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
  AMANDA THIS IS REALLY BEAUTIFUL. I COULD ALMOST HEAR THE MELODY MYSELF.
I LOVE THIS KIND OF POETRY BECAUSE IT MAKES ME FEEL GOOD.
| Posted on 2005-09-14 00:00:00 | by MMISS | [ Reply to This ]

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