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From my memory

Author: mimi
ASL Info:    30/f/ny
Elite Ratio:    3.66 - 597 /390 /111
Words: 72
Class/Type: Poetry /Longing
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From my memory

I close my eyes to see you
The gentle smile
that hides a thousand thoughts.
The shadows in your eyes
that shift to allow the brightest light to shine upon me.
I lay still and hold my breath
to let the memory of your scent
invade every corner of my world.
In these moments
every hair on my body stands in attention
awaiting the simple joys
of your touch.

Submitted on 2005-09-14 22:45:18     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a nice, sensual poem. I like how you describe your feelings as you recall the moment from memory. It is truly wonderful to feel this way about someone and it reminds me a lot of a poem I wrote all about someone touch and its effect. This is very well written and allows the reader to share in your thought and recall with you what you see when you think about this person. Very good poem! Take care!

| Posted on 2005-10-24 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
  simple yet very enticing to the heart. i like it so much.

how you materialize your feelings through the use of your words made it for me to feel what you feel...

for me this is what i call genuine poetry. great job.
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by solitary_cross | [ Reply to This ]
  beautiful, absolutely amazing, i love it...short but sweet, sweet but simple...great write, i love it keep writing youve got talent

<3 adalae
| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
  Sweet poem :) Written with so much purity and no-hassles that it's like breeze. This short poem successfully captures the essence of the feeling of 'lover's touch' in higher sense.

| Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]

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