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    dots Submission Name: Falling back to youdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 87
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Trying to get over someone but you keep going back to the person beacuse they mean a lot to you... please comment on it... thanks


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    dotsFalling back to youdots
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    Trying to get over the hump
    attempting to jump over the bump
    but it doesn't seem to matter is no use
    beacuse i keep falling back to you

    Now its been a couple of weeks
    searching, looking for a new person to meet
    someone who can relate to me
    a human being to help with my needs

    No matter how much i look
    nor where I seek
    I keep going back reopening the wound
    and still with so much pain, keep falling back to you




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 05:10:08     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That is gorgeous... and really sad. The line "I keep going back reopening the wound" seemed to stick out the most for me. I've done the same thing... I would expand on that, but your poem already said it all. Its been like 8 months and I still keep falling back to my ex... not physically anymore, but I think about him way too much. But yeah... very touching piece (is that how you spell that? or is it peice? hmm... the world may never know.) Anywho, this is excellent, as yours always are Another great job

    -nikkki

    ...fo shizzle.
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a lovely poem you have written here! It touches on such a painful experience in one's life and talks of the difficulties faced when trying to move on with life and get over someone who means so much to you. I can relate to this as I have experienced this once before in my life too. It just seems so hard to leave that person in the past and even though you know in your heart that it is not meant to be something pulls you back in again. Trying to be strong and move on is not easy and trying to find someone special who shares the same interests and desires is even more difficult. This poem is very well written and expressed with sensitivity and lots of feelings. Only one spelling correction here..."because" in the fourth line of the first stanza. Otherwise this is a great poem! Nice job! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      I think so many people can relate to this and that is what gives it so much appeal...you have a talent for putting out what you feel in a way that people can understand really well...keep writing.

    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      I can really relate to your poem, however the emotions just weren't there while i wa sreading it. why don't you try to make us as the readers " see" oyur poem. if you know what i mean
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Jac | [ Reply to This ]
      i can relate to this alot seen as its only been 1 month since i broke up wiv my x i have a new bf but i still miss my x lol :S anyways great poem and its defianitly goin in my faves lol
    take care
    izzi x
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by fallen_angel384 | [ Reply to This ]
      very brief but a lot of emotion in it. you really pour out your feelings in this poem. although i think it would be better if you emphasize your desperation of trying to forget him/her and always ending up "falling back". great work.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by solitary_cross | [ Reply to This ]
      oh my goodness, i really loved this poem, it was great and worded well...ive been through this before...keep writing, i would love to read more from you...

    <3 adalae
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      I thought this was a very good write. With specific emotions. I like the last two lines. When you expressed your love for this person as a open wound. because sometimes that is exactly how love feels. i think in the begining the flow was alittle off... but it was still good. I also like how you expressed how you wanted to meet someone new but somehow you couldnt.
    Now its been a couple of weeks
    searching, looking for a new person to meet
    All-in-all Good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]


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