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    dots Submission Name: Nauseousdots
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    Author: wakethedead
    ASL Info:    34/M/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 13/13/9
    Words: 215
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 921
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1446



    Description:
       This is a demo song for our band to play, but never really got the chance to be played. Iíve written this way back November 9, 2003 and still in raw format. This song tackles the experience with wanting to change, the choices to take, and finding ourselves back from where we begin.


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    dotsNauseousdots
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    Nauseous

    Given the opportunity
    to make a difference
    While distraction takes a toll on change
    (Iíve been) Working on apparent scheme
    (Then those) Chaos kept pouring in
    When tension ends and a light has emerged

    (Hell youíve) Worked your way around again
    Fabricating more deceit
    Misleading you to divulge more lies
    Why donít you try to make stand?
    Clear your mind from every plan
    I know itís hard when the tide is against you

    Failing to redeem myself
    While holding the grudges from past
    Remained part of what has been etched in mind
    When I let anxiety
    Take control a part of thee
    Iíll be heading back from where I have started

    Well was I taken far ahead?
    With all those diminishing words
    Why donít you spare me the illusion?
    And show me what youíre really worth

    (Well) Thatís what you want
    Thatís what youíll get
    Everything revolves around the place where stand
    Take what you need
    Strained there Ďtil I bleed
    Nauseous of emotional distress that you keep

    Failing to redeem myself
    While holding the grudges from past
    Remained part of what has been etched in mind
    When I let anxiety
    Take control a part of thee
    Iíll be heading back from where I have started




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 13:23:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Even without music, this sounds like a song I'd love. Heck, just as a poem I love it. What are our chances of ever hearing it sung?

    I'm definitely going to check out some of your other work.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Pax Parvani | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked it. it didn't knock my socks off, but good wording. it seemed to lack a complete center. like it was heading towards something but never got there.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]
      You should have played this. Very catcy. I would have loved to get to know the sound part. Captures the reality of life very well and goes higher than that.

    Good write :) Keep singing...
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by vedanta19 | [ Reply to This ]


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