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    dots Submission Name: The love/hate poemdots
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    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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       This is a little confusing piece read it a couple of times... please comment and thank you in advance


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    dotsThe love/hate poemdots
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    I love you
    I hate you
    girl go choke on a mentos

    I like you
    I despise you
    My god how much i want you

    I care now
    I dont now
    Hope that i had never met you

    Im so confused
    I see so clear
    Give you a big kick in the rear

    Your my world
    Your my demise
    You add the taste in my life

    I want to go
    I come back
    Like a yo-yo I return now

    You throw me
    You catch me
    You tore me like a fabric

    I love you
    I want you
    What would I be without you?

    I hate you
    I loathe you
    Why the hell I regard you?




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 15:51:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hee hee! You made me laugh with the first stanza here "girl go choke on a mentos"That is great and so funny!haha! This is a great poem. You touch on the classic love/hate relationship so well and portray your feelings of confusion so well! Once again I can relate to this poem of yours. I have had this kind of confusion over someone before too and man does it suck! I like the comparison to a yo-yo as that is exactly how it feels and I also like the line "you tore me like a fabric" I thought that added some great reference and insight to your feelings. This is very well written and expressed with great feelings! I can feel the frustration as I read this! Wonderful! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah..I understand this COMPLETELY.It's like there's that annoiying girl/boy who sits next to you and pokes you in the side.You hate them entirely for that and you want them to die,but,when you think about it,you would end up killing yourself or living your life knowing that you couldn't live without that person if they did...And that feeling really,really sucks!Trust me,I know.Well,anyway,an extoirdinarly great poem.It has a true meaning that probabley comes from deep within.Great job. -Lindel
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by LRRolins | [ Reply to This ]
      This made no sense. I think it had a deeper meaning than i could see. But this was quite weird. Not well written i must say that. Sorry but I dont really like this poem only because I cant understand it.

    Fukk Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]
      it isn't wierd one bit or confusing if you feel these feelings for some one it really doesn't sugar coat things and that is good ihate sugar coated things ~becka
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by boo boo | [ Reply to This ]
      I know for a fact that you can do better. It wasnt bad. It just wasnt your best. I dont like the flow. I dont know I guess you could have delivered the message with different wording.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]


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