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    dots Submission Name: (add on to) bitch now you deaddots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 507
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 431



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    dots(add on to) bitch now you deaddots
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    there ain't shit that you can tell me I don't already know/
    but see, the man in the mirror got plenty to show/
    and I'll yell it from the mountains so everybody will hear/
    your driving down the road, and whos that in your mirror/
    it's me.. your throat is slit, bitch now you dead/
    and seventeen be on your head/
    it's all good though/
    you had to go/




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 16:18:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      lol! i agree this was funny tho it isnt supposed to be...i thought it was kind of short...but kool! i havent read some of your stuff in a looooong aSs time! this was a good start!

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    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this one. it was funny 2 me even though i know it wasn't meant 2 be. it wasn't brilliant but it still hit me. it was raw emotion. now i know why amber likes ur writing so much. she writes stuff like this sometimes too. i think i read the first one a while back. what made u add this after so long?
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      Sounds like a rap to me, so i feel maybe you were trying to come across to a reader who understands that kind of talk, i wouldn't call it brilliant, but i'm sure that wasn't your intention to start with.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Martin S. Allen | [ Reply to This ]


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