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    dots Submission Name: Once Againdots
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    Author: roxygirl239
    ASL Info:    14/f/VA
    Elite Ratio:    3.39 - 450/305/44
    Words: 34
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1208
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 236



    Description:
       Wrote this awhile ago. I actually forgot what its about. lol. But i really want your comments, because I am very unsure of this one.


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    dotsOnce Againdots
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    I am the crimson sea
    Not the bleeding
    But the living
    My thoughts
    Float to my mind
    Once again
    And all is normal
    Once again
    I wail
    Once again
    My sea has shifted




    Submitted on 2004-04-16 18:57:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very strong emotions
    will nice if it was longer,maybe more emotions would have been revealed
    | Posted on 2004-04-16 00:00:00 | by bilal anaim | [ Reply to This ]


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