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    dots Submission Name: I Can't Stand Poetrydots
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    Author: honus
    Elite Ratio:    4.78 - 90/96/32
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsI Can't Stand Poetrydots
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    I
    can't stand
    Poetry, Man
    slammed
    ham
    jammed
    in a can
    I
    can't stand
    poetry, man.

    Blatant agendas
    propped up
    with toothpick words,
    wild toothed raving and
    wood pecker precision.

    I
    can't stand
    poetry, Man
    languid
    lovelorn
    lesbians
    lamenting
    lost labia
    I
    can't stand
    poetry, man

    My nephew asked me last week
    he asked
    "who was the first heterosexual
    white male to break
    the poetry color barrier?"
    He thinks Bukowski
    is some kind of literary
    Jackie Robinson

    I
    can't stand
    poetry, Man
    Pansies
    Propagating
    propeller
    powered
    penis
    preambles
    I
    can't stand
    poetry, Man

    And after Ginsberg
    finished howling ,
    He sliced Kerouac to tatters
    for committing the cardinal sin
    of loving America

    I
    can't stand
    poetry, Man
    Fickle
    Fingered
    flamboyants
    felching
    forced
    words
    through a straw




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 18:21:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this grows on you [me].

    i find the alliteration very irritating indeed, but that is the point, as it seems, and it adds to the scathing sarcasm that lies beneath, and sometimes right on the top too.

    it reads in a way that is reasonably well educated, though the relevance of that is neither here nor there, but i think that it does add to the merit of the sarcasm.

    you are clear and concise with what you actually want to say. you are over the top with what you want to take the piss out of.

    the importance of 'I' possessing its own line seems to be the key here, and to me, any self professed anything, especially an 'artist,' or a 'poet,' is a [censored] stain on a white rug. [on where the dog sits and then walks along it with its two front legs whilst draggin its arse and leaving a tyre track behind it]

    and this is what you seem to be saying.

    i really dont know what i feel. i dont really like it, but that is the point, and your point is well made and the tones are exact.

    so i guess it is not about making the right noises, just about making noises.

    maybe that explains why all the girls i have fu-cked have made farm animal sounds.

    maybe its been a long time since i commented and i really have nothing of note to say.

    take care
    on1eday.co.uk
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by on1eday.co.uk | [ Reply to This ]
      This is the funniest thing I have read on this site -lol.

    There was one quote "Nobody is possessed of more confidence than a bad poet." -lol.

    I think it was plato who said that art and philosophy havethe same basis, namely a sense of wonder in the world, but in the contemporary art world it seems like we humans just have too much time on our hands (and as for modern philosophy it is kind of like those tricks you find on the backs of matchboxes).

    That last para is a killer :)

    also
    Blatant agendas
    propped up
    with toothpick words,
    wild toothed raving and
    wood pecker precision.
    was pretty damn funny too.
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by kanu | [ Reply to This ]
      this is clever and smart and funny, but behind the humor is something deeper. It seems to me to be somewhat of a lament on the hypocrisies of poetry and in particular that of the Beat Poets (a time period that I believe produced some of the greatest poets ever, though I wouldn't necessarily name any of the above as such) and done very much in the language of that era.

    Would be almost laughable to suggest changes or corrections or the like on something like this. Fortunately I have none anyway. This is perfect as is. Certainly enough to make me curious about you.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by deadndreaming | [ Reply to This ]


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