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Lady liberty called on me

Author: k.o.malley
ASL Info:    28/female/seattle
Elite Ratio:    3.77 - 50 /66 /30
Words: 98
Class/Type: Poetry /Friendship
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About teling a friend his lady is cheating

Lady liberty called on me

Lady Liberty stay steady,
Liberty without changing.
Clinging to a torch,
Feigning for the flame.

Your word, your sage,
Decisions weighed, decisions made,
You had it, you own it.
Lady liberty you’re free,
Liberty without dignity.

His eyes, his lie,
Concern real, Concern rise,
He heard it, He knew it.
Lady liberty you’re bold,
Liberty without humility.

My grief, my relief,
Shown deceit, shown loyalty,
I apologize, I’m sorry.
Lady Liberty your fair
Liberty without boundaries.

Advocating all appeals,
Justify slight rewrites.
Liberty without defeat,
Lady liberty cry mercy.

Submitted on 2005-09-15 18:39:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  The notion itself is cleverly ironic... Lady Liberty is a statue... and there is nothing more earthbound than a thing made of rock and metal. Therefore... the notion of freedom is just something that lingers in our thoughts... but is it really there?

Even after you've attained a certain level of freedom you'd still be bound to a lot of aspects... one being is the manner in which you attained it.

Overall... I think this is very vocal of the fact that being human ties us down with the chains of civilization... and all the lady liberties know that.

Good job.
| Posted on 2005-09-26 00:00:00 | by ANGELO | [ Reply to This ]
  okay sorry back again this time with your help...much thanks for that. i like your reference to lady liberty - clever. given the info about whats going on about your two couple friends, I understand it and enjoyed reading it more. again your words are most captivating, and the ending...lady liberty cry mercy is the best. nicely done.

later days
| Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]
  okay ive read this piece twice and twice the words flew past me. somehow i understand this and at the same time i dont. however, you words and the rhtym are most captivating and hard to forget. so i am going to try and break this down. forgive me if this is so obvious and i dont quite catch on. i am starting to think that this isnt about the statue but rather the word, i dont know. i cant explain it but reading it holds me for some reason. maybe you can explain what youre doing here and explain how this relates to friendsip. i dont know. sorry if im not getting it.

later days
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by fiery_eyes | [ Reply to This ]

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