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    dots Submission Name: Hushdots

    Author: rws
    ASL Info:    58/m/ohio
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 2779/1297/258
    Words: 128
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       A merciless mother abandoning her four children led me to write this critique.

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    You may not
    realize it,
    unfortunate angel,
    but if your next daddy
    promises to marry
    me, I'm afraid
    you can't exist;
    at least not in
    my subdivision,
    and never as
    my kid.

    Of course you
    shouldn't resent
    my eloquent denial
    of maternal tenderness,
    ignorance may not
    be bliss, but
    it nestles in the
    supple highground
    of a sort of happiness.
    If I've lived as a
    lesser angel by
    lower heavens
    caressed, it was
    hunger that begrudged
    my wonder and
    graced each
    misshapen step.

    Please look after
    your sisters, your
    brother's weary
    head drifts with
    the aimless current
    each of your
    fathers fed,
    each Hurculean
    wonder mute
    in a flower bed.

    "Now, how do you
    like your blue-eyed
    boys, Mister Death?"
    she said.

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      This poem reminds me of a woman I unfortunately knew. She would have put it far less eloquently than you. She chose her new man over her daughter, put her through some traumatic experiences with her last serious boyfriend, and before that left her oldest sons to the devices of her very abusive husband...just so she could be free of him, minus having to go through the courts. Her reasoning, or lack of it, for her undeniable selfishness seemed to be a general lack of maternal feelings and a seething resentment towards her children...for the heavy responsibility she found to be overly burdening and the limitless amount of patience needed that she far from had. She just didn't like children or babies period and had no feelings of compassion towards them.
    How anyone male or female could be this way, I don't know. I only know that I despised her more than anyone I've ever met.
    | Posted on 2005-11-26 00:00:00 | by fo | [ Reply to This ]
      I hate women like that. Have the nerve to get pregnant...not do anything to prevent it...then not want the kids. These woman should be put in some kind of a home and treated the way they treated the kids. That is sad and disgusting. If I could, I would try and help all the children that need homes. To be so young with so many worries. It's just not right.

    This was very touching. You got me over here on a mission!

    Very very very good write!

    Li Li
    | Posted on 2005-11-04 00:00:00 | by Munchie_1226 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an interesting poem. It touches on a very real and tragic problem in the world. How a mother could ever do this to her children is beyond my understanding. Selfishness is the word that comes to mind. What kind of woman would even want a man who wouldnt love her children anyway? There must be some kind of mental illness associated with this behavior. It is tragic that so many women who want to have children, and would be great parents, cant have them, and there are so many people like this in the world who dont even care about their own children. It is truly heartbreaking. This is a well written poem. Very sad, yet very true. Take care.

    | Posted on 2005-11-03 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]

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