Shadows of the mountains reach across the
desert sand.
Mighty ocean waves become a drop upon
my hand.
Red and yellow blossoms wet from
morning rain.
The call of the loon and its lovers
sweet refrain.
Masterpieces all, each in their
special way,
Concocted by the Master, they say in
seven days.
Seven days or milleniums it changes not
the truth,
His masterpieces stand above times effort
to dilute.
Ahhh what do you mean not one of your best works? Haha. Actually, I am very sorry, but for a time, I had forgotten about your poetry. I now remember favorite-ing some and really liking some, and so, I could expect the same with this. And for once, what I expected was what happened. Very nice. In the first part, I liked how every other line could be something beautiful in itself. ".......... desert sand. .... my hand. ..... morning rain. ....... sweet refrain." Just kinda nice-like and such.... And I need to catch up on some other poems. Peace, LucyDiamond
Really love that last sentence. Hinges the whole thing together. Rhyme is a harsh mistress for me...i think it really only belongs in music...but then, that's just me. "time's effort to dilute"...hmmm...gonna have to ponder on that one.
I don't know, it seems like it could be the other way around. Depends on perspective. Sometimes it seems like all we remember are the bad things.
red and yellow...awe hell, throw in a blue blossom too see you around kc
This is a very good addition to the masterpiece poems! It is very well written and expressed and overall just a nice write. All of the wonders of the planet are indeed masterpieces all in their own right. Beautiful and elegant creations that have stood the test of time. The last line really sums this one up really well! A good poem! Take care!
Man oh man all of these Masterpiece poems are exactly that.This is just beautifully done. Everything about it is just right. And it is straight forward and to the point. I wouldn't change a word. Not a word is wasted and it reads very smoothly. Thanks for a great write. Bill
this is a beautiful addition to the masterpiece challenge! nature is indeed a masterpiece, created by the Divine. this is simple yet glorious in your expression of love for nature.
So glad you decided to join in, Dan. We all have masterpieces in life too. I took a different slant, as usual, to the challenge. I really enjoyed this write. A beautiful, soft gentle approach. Great job. And have a really good weekend. Love ya. Carol
I enjoyed the visual imagery and the reverie in your word choices. The awe-inspiring masterpieces handed down to us from the Master are truly worthy of adoration.
well, for a quick write you certainly captured the essence of a masterpiece! nicely done and I love the images you convey in it. I hope you're going somewhere equally lovely for the weekend! nice write Dan!
I like anything that appreciates nature like this. You did a good job with this one. Yeah, beautiful is beautiful whether accomplished in a near eternity of six days. In "The call of the loon and it's lovers/ sweet refrain," "it's" should be "its" (The one with the apostrophe means "it is"). I hope all is well, Amy
i have to agree with the other commenters: i loved the first stanza for it's clear pictures, and how magnificent those few words made the world. the second stanza is made very memorable by the last two lines alone (for me), for they are to the point and make me feel somewhat small in this masterpiece. and i sort of like the feeling of being small...
The two beginning stanzas are written extrememly well. the ocean in a drop on your hand is clever and i enjoyed that part very good. the 7 days metaphor very witty and lead the piece nicely to it's ending.
It is a very well done piece...even if not the best, it has qualities of simple ellagance in it, which is admirable. The first and second stanzas seem to be very different in the wording (one is kind of dreamlike...surreal, while two is the blatent truth...straightforward, no flowers kinda thing) which is good, just adds to the quality of the piece, great stuff...
The was brilliant Dan, very nice. Its been quite awhile since I last stopped and I thought I might drop in a read a poem or two, I'm glad I did. I really Dan, indeed a masterpiece.
Submission Name: Masterpiece
