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    dots Submission Name: Jump, sarah, Livedots
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    Author: Paul 2.0
    ASL Info:    17/m/ca
    Elite Ratio:    4.69 - 5/3/2
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 800
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 418



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       Yeah, I know it's bad, but it has it's own significant meaning to me.


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    dotsJump, sarah, Livedots
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    Jump, sarah, Jump
    From the cool rock,
    he'll catch you soon enough,
    don't let the perverted son's rays blind you,
    the ground is there,
    Fall,sarah,Fall,
    Let your feet hit the sand,
    sink in deep and revel,
    Feel it slip between your fingers and relish every second of it,
    don't bother looking back,
    Live, sarah, Live





    Submitted on 2005-09-15 23:22:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this
    I dont know if this is what you were shooting for but to me this write created an image of a child who has very few friends or playmates so she befriends the ocean and finds the best friend she ever had waiting for
    Truly enjoyed this
    God Bless
    Ron

    Please if you get a chance Please take a look at some of my writes and let me know what you think
    Thank You
    Ron
    | Posted on 2006-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      I've never had such a poem written about me... and I thank you for it, brory... and I'll try to live up to it.
    <3 Sarah
    | Posted on 2005-09-15 00:00:00 | by Adaria | [ Reply to This ]


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