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    dots Submission Name: A Portrait of A Maskdots
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    Author: Adaria
    ASL Info:    20/F/AR
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 39/38/14
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 722
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 589



    Description:
       A feeling... in random intervals that I have. Just looking for... nothing, actually. Sharing I suppose. And it's also pretty much the only thing I've written in a time... so here ya go.


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    dotsA Portrait of A Maskdots
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    Such shallow beauty in those blank eyes.
    They look out at me, haunting with their gaze.
    The people pass by, remarking on the portrait's beauty
    And I stand staring, crying
    Because nothing of true beauty is captured.
    Yes, the lines are perfect,
    And the expression one of flawless content.
    Yet there is nothing that hints of a mystery beneath the surface
    Nothing that tells of the potential depth.
    It is only a perfect mask.
    Hiding a pained face,
    And all of the despairing thoughts
    Which make her human.




    Submitted on 2005-09-15 23:43:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is an amazing peice. very well written, and I liked the setup for it. Someone looking at a portrait and projecting thier own self-concept onto it is something i havn't seen before. welcome back, as well.
    | Posted on 2006-02-25 00:00:00 | by thor_s avatar | [ Reply to This ]


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