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    dots Submission Name: Tip of the Icebergdots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 63
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1257
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 387



    Description:
       We all do it. all over the world. Men & women alter their consciousness, or look for some solace. Some take it too far; some get yanked to redemption.


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    dotsTip of the Icebergdots
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    Kava grogged fishermen
    Beetle nuts crimson chin
    Hemp seeds, Scythian
    bursting from the steam.

    Cannabis Hannibal
    Coca burning spent feet
    Beta waves drum beat
    dervish dreams neat.

    Horse bones tilled soil
    Furrows in the long sun
    Blood spilled breath stroke
    loser's life won.




    Submitted on 2005-09-16 08:49:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Well, Felicia, I did okay until the last stanza. It's clear (at least to me) that you're talking about different psychotropic (psychedelic?) substances and experiences, i, the dervish's drums. But I don't understand horse bones tilled soil, etc. That one I don't get.

    It's very cryptic, so is kind of hard to critique, besides, what's there to criticize? You basically wrote a poetic list without passing judgment on the items listed. And my motto? Who needs drugs when you've got CHOCOLATE! mae
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by mae | [ Reply to This ]


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