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These Moments in Time


Author: Day DreaMeR
ASL Info:    19/F/somewhere
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Words: 97
Class/Type: Random Thoughts /Misc
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ummm yea some more thoughts feel free to bash it.


These Moments in Time



These thoughts stir in my mind,
As the passing of time goes,
What do we make of it?,
Life,
And time,
How do we spend each minute,
Of every hour,
And every hour of every day?,
Does time ever really stop,
and leave us in the moment?,
Is there something,
That tries to send us a message?,
Or a warning?,
Or the fact that we need to remember,
A detail so little,
That could mean so much later,
These moments in time,
Are what we should pay attention to,
For they might mean something,
To us later




Submitted on 2005-09-16 14:26:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Of all the amazing things a man can do, he cannot halt, alter or manipulate time. Time is the one thing that truly controls our existences as human beings.

And for something you can't see, or feel, smell or hear...its a sense of its own. Because you can measure it, remember it, and look forward to it. Interesting huh?

Your poem got my wheels spinning.

Props, kudos and cherry a$$ fu*k cakes.

MyX
| Posted on 2005-10-17 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
  a good write with some deep thought thrown in
i believe we should definately not take our life for granted and relax evrey now and then and let the day sink in
time is actually a precious gift with many meanings

if we spent more time evaluating what weve done and what we need to accomplish then our life here on earth would be much more peaceful

when you asked is there something trying to send us a message i believe that is music
as ive said in my poem Music it is the voice of the world
able to bring all together as one

Great Write


Take Care
Ron
| Posted on 2005-10-15 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
  I actually liked this! Even though I can tell this is just something like a rough draft, you said a lot of stuff that people actually ask me all the time.
I think that with a little bit of minor changes, this could be a great piece!
| Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by miss__smiles | [ Reply to This ]
  it's always the little things that count but if you can't remember them then what good are they huh? i enjoyed reading this it gives a little perspective on on not taking things for granted. or at least thats what i think ha. nice job.
| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
  ok...ok...i loved this bren...this is fantastic...have you even noticed how much you have grown as a writer sice you first joined elites...i personally love this i think its perfect...ange
| Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
  I believe time does stop from time to time. It is difficult to reflect on the little things in life so no one ever really realizes what has happened they are to busy to caught up in multi tasking stuck thinking about what they have to do every second of everyday never thinking of things they want to do. To them time never stops so they never slow down but i bet if we all just take a little time out to realise that the sands of time stops once in a while things would be different, confusion would no longer exist Or the fact that we need to remember,
A detail so little,
That could mean so much later,
Those three lines stand out they are the true meaning of that poem and you did a really good job on your word choice and the flowing of your piece its something everyone should realise keep this up and i will be back for more that i can promise you
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by wallya20 | [ Reply to This ]


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