Description: i wrote this one when i was alone in my room and was thinking about all the things that had happened in my life
please leave me a comment or send me a pm and tell me what you thought as it may help me on my next poems thanx
izzi x
!Sadness and Heartbreak! -------------------------------------------
She tries to forget
All her sadness and tears
But it comes back to haunt her
Like all her fears
Deepdown inside
She falls apart
Thinking of all the
Sorrow in her heart
She can never hold on
To what shes got
And only realises her mistake
When all is lost
As she lay there alone
Strange thoughts come to mind
She seeks a place
She'll never find
Every night she sits and cries
Wondering why she'd rather die
Then never be in his arms again
Why can't he come back
And heal all her pain
Shes told him she loves him
Until it made her sick in the head
'I know you do huni'
was all that he said
She tries to forget him
As its breaking her apart
But when hes gone in her head
He's still in her heart...
The relation is amazing. How you want someone so bad and they just won't understand how bad you need them. Personal experiences came rushing back when I read this. The flow and wording and the style you did it in was great. Can't complain.
Hell yeah!!!! THis was a very good piece, i really enjoyed, you totally conveyed the sadness in this, i know its hard to get over guys, its terrible, it takes a long time, im surprised the flow was so good too, i love the line "deep down inside her she falls apart", and dont bother about jeffiner comment, you do have '"something" already, changing the words around wont help, you totally gert the point across, kudos!!
Submission Name: !Sadness and Heartbreak!
