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    dots Submission Name: Friday Nite Featuredots
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    Author: CleoCollier
    ASL Info:    40/F/South
    Elite Ratio:    4.44 - 83/84/26
    Words: 160
    Class/Type: Misc/Comedy
    Total Views: 1013
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1012



    Description:
       When I did this poem, I said the 2X7 line thru a kid's toy megaphone that distorted the voice. A chaotic hammered dulcimer was playing along. It was so funny to see people's faces in the video! Most were horrifically confused, & some DID think it was funny, which it was s'posed to be. BTW, does anyone know how to REALLY spell chisembop? (that tapping the fingers to add thing from the 70's)


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    dotsFriday Nite Featuredots
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    Why is it always sweaty, hirsute cherry pickers
    When I'm in the mood for an edible road worker?
    2X7 is 11

    Depressed experimental macaques
    Fed Spanish soap operas & prozac can't just
    say no
    2X7 is 11

    World Navel concept flash: The only creative act
    that protrudes the navel is...
    creating another navel
    2X7 is 11

    If I don't bathe for one day I smell like cumin
    Don't bathe for 2 I'm a SKUNK WEED HUMAN!
    2X7 is 11

    Just to see my Baptist grandma do a triple take
    I had 2 grooms & a uroburos
    on my wedding cake
    2X7 is 11

    I'm developing a quantum headache
    From these nagging incongruities
    2X7 is 11

    Curses hit the ground like it's raining frogs
    I tally my blessings using chisembop
    2X7 is 11

    Blessings on your head, mazel tov chisembop!




    Submitted on 2005-09-16 21:06:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I think there are some pretty good lines in this. The rest of it is probably best left up to how it is performed. I can see this live thru a megaphone or something as a cool opening act!
    And its inspired me enough to at least see what else you've been getting into.

    -Shoes
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by iShoes | [ Reply to This ]
      Felicia, I do believe that you've lost your mind!

    This is insane! (but...extremely funny)

    It takes a rare talent to take outlandish random thoughts and make others see them as funny, usually they just see them as boring or stupid. This is neither.

    This is funny.

    Well done

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]


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