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    dots Submission Name: freestyleing part 3dots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Comedy
    Total Views: 779
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    dotsfreestyleing part 3dots
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    Chillin at home
    On the phone
    Talkin to a nigga sayin he bout to cry
    Cause in the flood that nigga moma died
    My knees fall to the floor as i am in aw
    But to me your pain is unsaw
    But still you have my simpathy
    And all u can say is "u dont know wut u ment to me"
    Got off the phone and call my girl
    Making sure she is okay because she is my perl
    We only been going out for a week
    But every time i see her in the knees i get weak
    Think bout them honduran thighs
    And as i stary into ur eyes
    I become hypnotise
    If u r the the end then let it be my demise
    BUt u wont let me hit that
    Cause u think all i wanna do is get that
    U know split that
    But i aint with that
    so this is the closer to these three verses
    I hope to your lyrical need it nurses




    Submitted on 2005-09-16 21:43:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      bout time u posted something. too bad no one's read it yet. ur typing is horrible. dammit.
    u mispelled:
    awe
    sympathy
    meant
    pearl
    hypnotised

    u can correct this and repost it if u want people to read it.
    | Posted on 2005-10-06 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      dude....don't post stuff without writing anything ....thats pretty dumb forreal......I'm not sure what else to say ........it woun't let me write up to forreal so I ahve to write this....
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by maninthemirror | [ Reply to This ]
      that was pretty lame chaz. u couldn't think of anything to write so u just posted a title. i can't believe i'm gracing this with a title. although i was tired of hearing about u fantasizing about beyonce.
    "troy"
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      wow heavy, where is the song???? Okay I'll go with it... This was nice yep I really enjoyed it::: in case you didnt know that was sarcasm:::
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      uhm.. i think ya need.. to add something?... possibly...
    nice title.. though a little misleading..
    peace
    danielle
    i hope i can read it filled out
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by sacred_tears | [ Reply to This ]


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