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Dance While The Moon Lasts


Author: Toxic Rose
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*sigh*

One year- that's all I've got. Well, I'll make the best of it, that's for sure. Let's hope our friendship lasts until the end..


Dance While The Moon Lasts



What is fairer, day or night,
Gleaming yellow or stars shining bright,
Laughing sun or crooning moon-
Sphere of fire or white balloon?

I'll choose the diamond starlit skies
For darkness blinds the probing eyes
That judge in the misty light of day;
Night speeds all those doubts away.

With you, the moonlight will illuminate
Every beauty we've ever made.
Hurry; for the moon rides across the sky-
For memories shall fade as the night must die.

But listen- music gently floats down from the stars
One last, sweet tune to seal the love that's ours
Dance with me, add music to this night-time tryst;
Wind swirls 'round as we twirl in its midst.

Let's savor the time we have together-
A single slow dance can be still forever.
Though soon this'll all be left in the past,
Just hold me, dear, dance while the moon lasts.

-Dedicated to Chase Young




Submitted on 2005-09-16 22:09:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  I love I love. Night is such a common theme, but you have taken it to something that I do like, a lot. Several very poetic and heartfelt lines you have here. For some reason, this stuck with me the most
"Hurry; for the moon rides across the sky-
For memories shall fade as the night must die."

Keep writing lovely love poems. Peace, Lucy
| Posted on 2005-12-19 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  Very romantic and touching poem. I would have chose the night too, for much the same reasons. I think you have done a very good job with this poem. You have described the evening of your dance very well, and your emotions ring true to that of a young heart in love. Have a great last year together, and may your memories last you both a lifetime! cher
| Posted on 2005-09-16 00:00:00 | by Inducted_Kitty | [ Reply to This ]


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