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    dots Submission Name: 1:36dots
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    Author: particularshard
    ASL Info:    23/m/DC
    Elite Ratio:    4.21 - 1159/1392/363
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 218
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    Bytes: 949



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       I actually wrote a way better piece earlier - when i was sober - nobody read it - its called Locusts. this is the same mood, but now im ripped....


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    Six shots of whisky, on my ninth beer
    Killed that bottle of wine,
    Still I feel my vision's clear
    Enough to hop behind the wheel
    Drive with no fear,
    Catch the bar before 2am's here
    The sexiness of the fatal,
    Starin at my navel
    Somehow the whole world seems just a fable
    And a peel at the label
    Of my St. Pauli Girl
    Knowing alcholics are the ones that always hurl
    And that's not me -
    In fact I feel that I could eat
    Some candy maybe, or well done meat
    But I'm rambling now, and I've made my point
    Instead of driving my car I'll have one last joint
    Because not driving drunk i easy -
    My speedy WRX would leave me smeared on a wall greasy
    And I feel this world needs me -
    So i'll crawl to bed
    Until 1:36 tomorrow I'll just rest my head
    So I'm out.,....




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      Hey to call a piece"LOCUSTS..who are we kidding..Its ILL but it sounds a little CHILDISH, but this new title is rather CAPTIVATING. Nevertheless, about the actual piece- I fell a little woozy myself after reading this one. It reads like a diary of a DRUNKEN MASTER. Hey you did an incredible job of drawing us into the mind of an ALCOHOLIC. This piece screams for ADDICTION..whether its toxic or not but its pleasing to the senses of whoever is entangled in the web of that addiction. It has a very hilarious slant to it. Its a bit of a joke that there really is indeed people who get sloshed half of their lives...Its such a waste and one doesnt need to get through life drunk...We need to be sober and be intouch with whatever HURT/CHALLENGE we maybe reluctant to confront as opposed to us shielding and ignoring reality...Nevertheless, you have an ingenious ability of CRAFTING YOUR THOUGHTS...Be happy...Nobantu
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by Nobantu | [ Reply to This ]



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