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    dots Submission Name: A Good Woman Painterdots

    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 31
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
    Total Views: 1160
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       This was actually inspired by Jackson Pollock and Modest Mouse. Not that the talents of those people carry over into the work itself.

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    dotsA Good Woman Painterdots

    We could cut
    My head off
    Have ourselves a planet

    Make a map
    For you to
    Decorate with

    All the speckles
    And pretend I
    never planned it.

    Submitted on 2005-09-17 00:28:54     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      We could cut
    My head off
    Have ourselves a planet

    I LOVED that! I really enjoyed this. Very unique and great to read! You have a very original way of writing and this definitely stood out for me.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by Sugar | [ Reply to This ]
      lol u even tring to ryhm this site says skills and u show none. this one is longer but has no point. realy kid why u say that crap to me.
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      In these few words you created quite an image
    Its extremely cleverly written
    the brain
    I loved it
    And hey I Havent heard from you in a while hope everything is ok
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    | Posted on 2005-11-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      i agree it sounds like lyrics, but it feels like only part of a song. i like it so far but i feel like there's a lot more yu can say with it.
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by colerinja | [ Reply to This ]
      this almost sounds like lyrics. i could see this being sung by incubus or death cab for cutie, or something along those lines.
    i like how few words you're able to paint a picture with.

    keep writing.

    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by jeffiner | [ Reply to This ]

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