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    dots Submission Name: Summer (A Hockey Haiku)dots

    Author: eliwhitneyradio
    Elite Ratio:    3.15 - 49/51/13
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Haiku/Comedy
    Total Views: 997
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 92

       Haikey Hocku

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    dotsSummer (A Hockey Haiku)dots

    Watched the glacier be-
    come a hockey rink with trap
    doors, then the puck sank

    Submitted on 2005-09-17 00:30:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!

    ||| Comments |||
      I love the flow. Dead on.
    Although Be.
    Come is sorta dodgy... but who cares.
    And to the guy that said this was too SHORT...


    That is priceless.
    | Posted on 2006-01-02 00:00:00 | by Redstarr | [ Reply to This ]
      lol what I wrote is to be said as a song but u to young to think like that look I said it was lyrics and you got some prity dumb crap can u write anthing longer. Hey I realy would care if it came from someone who has work to be respected but yours is crap
    | Posted on 2005-12-12 00:00:00 | by DrewDilla | [ Reply to This ]
      sad, hockey is such a great sport and that poor little puck, did you try to save it? I see you have another post called "Heimlich" ( I haven't read yet) so I was just wondering. I am not much of a haiku writer myself, suppose I just don't have the time to write anything so short.
    ( that was meant to be funny). I would have to give this a thumbs up. I particularly like the way you chose to split be and come, interesting, I like.

    | Posted on 2005-11-11 00:00:00 | by Milo shanley | [ Reply to This ]
      its too short and you could have done better in putting this together!

    And you need to have something to inspire you in order to write!
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      dude don't listen to the haters, it was good. Not all of us have to be inspired by bunnies and love.
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Big J | [ Reply to This ]

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