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    dots Submission Name: Slowlydots

    Author: wakethedead
    ASL Info:    34/M/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 13/13/9
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
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       Written a month ago. This song is uplifting. Questioning myself with the blessings i took for granted. Which in turn, reminds me to take things slow.

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    Slowly I begin to wonder
    When everything goes wrong youd make it right
    Ive hesitated long enough
    to do what I can do to ease the pain

    So now we've reached the end
    So how are we gonna stay away...

    Slowly risen out of every
    Opportunity that goes my way...
    Driven in with hopes and dreams
    That one day you'll come out right here to see

    So now we've reached the end
    So how are we gonna stay away...

    Slowly rise above your hate from grief
    Are you with me
    Are you with me
    Are you with me

    Slowly taking every step
    To accomplish every duty that resides
    Have you ever tried to look inside for
    An answer that would somehow free your mind

    So now we've reached the end
    So how are we gonna stay away...

    Slowly rise above your hate from grief
    Are you with me
    Are you with me
    Are you with me

    Submitted on 2005-09-17 11:09:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Slowly is a nice title of your poem.It looks like you have lost your love and slowly you are realising what you have lost and also wondering whether you will be able to live without your love and also hoping your love to come back to your life.This is written in a very poetic way.It is a very good attempt.Keep it up.I liked your poem.
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]

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