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    dots Submission Name: The Masterpiecedots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 132
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 598
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    Description:
       From Crow:
    I just randomly decided to make a challenge. Yes, I challenge all of you here at le Elite Skills to write a poem entitled "The Masterpiece".


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    dotsThe Masterpiecedots
    -------------------------------------------


    To master a piece of poetry
    or any sort of art
    is to have tamed a wild beast.
    Then it must be named
    and displayed
    as your David,
    Sunflowers, self-poured-trait
    or Mona Lisa.

    It must be more
    than ordained airy words.
    It must hang in admiration,
    lynched for public
    gratification and adulation.
    You amputate more than an ear.
    Your heart is sacrificed to needs
    of appreciation and recognition.

    Or perhaps they'll treat your
    sacred contribution as
    a creative abomination.
    The fickle critics fondle
    your masterpiece with
    jaded contemplation
    to justify rejection.

    Art lives wild beyond the cage.
    It roams and feeds in need of survival.
    The master cherishes independence.
    The pieces mark her territory.
    Surrounded, she calls this home.




    Submitted on 2005-09-17 13:57:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is really good Chrystine
    I really liked this
    You are saying to us that poetry is a work of art which it is that lives on forever
    This Is so true
    Your Friend
    Ron

    And Thank You for the recent comments
    I always enjoy hearing from you
    Yterday I was Invited to read Two Poems at The John Lennon Memoeial In Hollywood
    All Went Great
    Please Keep In Touch
    Ron
    | Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This is indeed a most wonderful addition to this challenge. This is so well written and expressed and speaks so much truth about writing poetry or any art for that matter. This is written with elegance and style and truly reflects how poetry really exists. My favorite stanza:

    Art lives wild beyond the cage.
    It roams and feeds in need of survival.
    The master cherishes independence.
    The pieces mark her territory.
    Surrounded, she calls this home.

    That just says it all. This is truly a brilliant poem and a wonderful tribute to poets and poetry in general. Very nice job with this. Take care.

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-11-10 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      Art lives wild beyond the cage.
    It roams and feeds in need of survival...

    i loved these lines the best. this makes me think of a quote by May Sarton, "Poetry is a balky donkey." indeed... we cannot cage the muse, she speaks our truth. not everyone can or will appreciate, but it is our truth nonetheless, and we master our piece, so to speak...

    wonderful addition to the masterpiece challenge!

    much love,
    ~Cat
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh yes, when children are young we tell them every scratch they make on paper is gorgeous. And it isn't real, so why do we fake out appreciation? Pardon me, that was just thought from an entirely intriguing write. Just this morning I remembered the piano teacher/task masters who shaped great musicians, they were not always easy or gave their approval freely.

    I had one thought yesterday, love moves us forward, our need for it teaches us.

    It must be more
    than ordained airy words.
    It must hang in admiration,
    lynched for public
    gratification and adulation.
    You amputate more than an ear.
    Your heart is sacrificed to needs
    of appreciation and recognition.

    I love the feel of honest friends who will tell me I'm wrong when I need it. A band of merry men who admire? It doesn't fit, and the sustain of real friendships lasts beyond any disagreements. Don't ask me how I've gleaned this in a relationship way, I think its just about being authentic.


    "ordained airy words " you are a master of hardcore
    punography, crack me up. I am going to save this one just because it contains such valuable words on honesty, and more, but I need more time to study,
    I love it!

    Nan
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Chrystine,
    Forever am I awed at trying to tell you how beautiful your poetry is. There a few writers on here that just totally captivate me and I love reading their work...you are among those few.

    This is so very well written, you have spoken that which is a masterpiece and expressed it in the most colorful and descriptive of terms. The second stanza rings so true and well the first one grabbed me right in...and I just flow and feel the ease of the whole piece as I read on...

    Beautifully done Chrystine

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]


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