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    dots Submission Name: who 's worth the tears?dots
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    Author: lost and alone
    ASL Info:    19/F/Sandiego,CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 159/140/58
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 938
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    dotswho 's worth the tears?dots
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    I keep telling myself,
    I won't ever,feel this way again.
    I'll never cry over antother man.
    So why am I crying over you?
    I just don't know what,
    I'm suppose to do.
    Somethimes,
    you drive me crazy,
    and other times,
    you make me laugh so hard.
    There are days when,
    I just wanna smack you,
    and days,
    when I can't help but kiss you.
    and now,
    your not even here to piss me off.
    I keep thinkin,
    your gonna walk around the corner,
    with a cup a coffee in your hand.
    and a smirk on your face.
    when you don't I wonder why.
    Then I remember,
    and all I wanna do is cry.
    I feel so selfish,
    I should be thinking
    about how your feeling,
    and not about how I feel.
    I miss you so much,
    but I don't know
    where all these feelings are
    coming from.
    It scares me at how fast
    I get attached.
    It makes me want to
    turn around and run.
    I'm so afraid I'm gonna get hurt,
    and be the fool that fell for the joke
    and thought someone
    actually gave a shit about me.




    Submitted on 2005-09-17 15:57:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I thought this was put together with alot of feeling, but a few things could be fixed. You do express your feelings strongly, but somehow it kind of threw me off and some parts. Keep up the work though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by sone | [ Reply to This ]
      Soo i deffinantly agree with Dawndy, I so can relate with you i loved it a few minor flaws, but over all a great wirte.
    great job. keep it up.
    liam/patrick
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
      Very good I like it. I think that it would make a great lyric. I could feel the truth in it which to me is one of the most important parts of the work. I think that some of the best stuff written was from pure pain. Sad but true. Keep on writing. God Bless, Dawn
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]


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