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    dots Submission Name: Abusive Deathdots
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    Author: WandWielder
    ASL Info:    21-f-maryland
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 55/62/16
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    Description:
       This is just a ruff thing i jotted down after hearing a womans story at the self defence class i teach. Her sister had been an abused wife, that lost her unborn child thanks to her husband. She killed him and then her self leaving a note saying that she blamed her self for her childs death. That if she had killed him earlier the child would be alive.



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    dotsAbusive Deathdots
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    With fixed sensation,
    I sing of a life,
    Torment, slavery, uselessness,
    A longing for one forever lost,
    And never found
    An innocent,
    A death he gave,
    Dreaming, Pain, Hurt,
    Another loss of a life,
    Still there yet not,
    Murder, his peace,
    An end to screams,
    A life still present yet gone from mine,
    Friendship lost, secret rot, unworthiness,
    With fixed sensation,
    I sing of death,
    Suicide, breaking down, A death cry,
    The source mine.




    Submitted on 2005-09-17 17:40:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Excellent! I started to cry when i read this, this really made me think. I can really relate to this!
    "I sing of death,
    Suicide, breaking down, A death cry,
    The source mine."
    Omg wow! I don't really know what to say but this poem really made realize somethings. Thankyou for this!
    | Posted on 2005-09-17 00:00:00 | by rent_a_fairy | [ Reply to This ]


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