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    dots Submission Name: My roomdots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
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    Description:
       My room really pwns. It's my domain; lair; haven. Great place to chill.


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    Imagine the room smells like incense,
    The sweet smells of madness,
    Tickling your overwhelmed sinus.

    Mushrooms grow out of the walls,
    And rock stars congregate on the ceiling,
    While horned horses prance in the halls.

    Alice from wonderland often vacations here,
    As does Zero, from a Nightmare Before Xmas,
    When they leave, they do shed a dry tear.

    It's simple, it's florescent white,
    The colour can seduces your retinas,
    Under the chilling black light.

    There's much to imagine in this room,
    Dancing brown tins, books of revolution,
    But for me, all it is,

    Is a sweet smelling tomb.




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      nice imaginary .. a good way to describe yoruy roomm ilove it .. well i hope you can keep writing
    peace and love!
    Victor!
    | Posted on 2006-02-27 00:00:00 | by vitoko | [ Reply to This ]
      okay lay off the acid for a sec...nice imagery yes but what the [censored] is up with mushrooms growing out of the walls, ive some wierd [censored] but shrooms and alice in wonderland...riiiiiiiight...
    | Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      The imagery is wonderful here, and the end caught me offgaurd. I'm not used to being caught offgaurd so you did great.
    Loveage,
    Mike
    | Posted on 2006-02-23 00:00:00 | by sageeriol | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice imigary
    It seems like the thoughts of a mad person - which is always a fun image :D
    I like the description and have to warn you i am now searching for your house and will soon be killing you and assuming your identity so that i can have your room
    Have a nice day :)
    Angel
    (just kidding - its too much effort to kill people and i think someone would notice ;))
    | Posted on 2006-02-17 00:00:00 | by The_Angelic_Dea | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow. I love everything about this. The descriptions are perfect. It kind of reminds me of my room... the incense, rock stars, tomb, ect. You have so many great lines that I can't pick a favorite. I dont even know what else to say. Very nicely done. Excellent job

    -nikkki
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Liv2LoveThePain | [ Reply to This ]
      hiiiiiii angipiiieeee! I luff your room, I luff you, you rock and such. Get up there on the ceilin with those rockin' stars! -dances off- Have a lufferly day!
    ~Le Crow
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]
      You certainly evoke some wild and wonderful images here, Rue.

    Apart from your description, I would say you're describing your mind, and the various forms it can take at times.

    Rock stars on the ceiling? Priceless!

    Very enjoyable

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Whoa, great write. Very descriptive. I particularly enjoyed the first paragraph, i think that on is the best. You must have the best room ever! I do not entirely know who Zero is (3rdP) Yes, this is a great write, be proud, but get out of you're room eventually! lol -Cass
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by lost_and_forgotten | [ Reply to This ]


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