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    dots Submission Name: Melting potdots

    Author: josymanthegreat
    ASL Info:    21/m/GA from Puerto Rico
    Elite Ratio:    4.73 - 337/364/104
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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       This was my thought back when I came over to America from Puerto Rico so yeah just thought I would put them into some words

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    dotsMelting potdots

    This I didnt know
    Im losing myself
    in this melting pot

    My culture being fused
    Trying to fight it is no use
    I feel so empty and confused
    inside this melting pot

    I keep struggling though
    trying to keep my thought
    I think about what I brought
    Into this melting pot

    The flavor of another land
    The views from another hand
    The thoughts from the ocean and the sands
    Now are in this melting pot

    Submitted on 2005-09-18 09:16:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This was good
    I didn't get it intell i read the whole thing than i actully got it. The only htin gi didn' t get was the melting pot thing. but whatever. well hope to here from you and keep the good.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      this is simply a good, clean cut poem. and unlike most poetry, it's not depressing!(although depressive poetry is my favorite.) i especially enjoyed how you changed up each ending line a little. good effort, keep writing.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]
      i know what you mean, about feeling like you're just being melted into everyone else. I've felt like that before, like someone was pouring me into a mold. i really like this, it's one of those poems where you don't realize the significance of what you've just read until you finish. it's really nice.

    cheers, Azael
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Anticlownperson | [ Reply to This ]
      I didnt knwo you were from Puerto Rico. Well... N-e-wayz, I thought the poem was pretty good. I didnt know what you were talking about until I read the desciption thoug, but I guess all poetry doesnt really have to elaborate on what it is talking about. I'm not sure I get the whole melting pot reference though. But anywayz good work! ::: smile:::
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]

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