False Reflection by shmuzzelle

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Author:	shmuzzelle
ASL Info:	20/girl/canada
Elite Ratio:	8 - 261/134/30
Words:	108

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	350
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	798

Description:
Yeah, I'm not totally sure where this came from. I just started writing, and this is what came out of it.

False Reflection dots

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Look in the mirror, what do you see?
The carefully formulated exterior
The disguises the real you
Inside you are nothing more than
Anyone else, we're all the same
Underneath it all
Living within our carefuly designed
Ideal dream worlds
Trying to protect ourselves
From the land of unknown
What is forgotten is that
Uncertainty can bring something that is unexpected,
Something that is beneficial
But will never be discovered
Eventually the dream will disintegrate
Leaving behind the shell of our
Former selves, empty
Discarded like a newspaper
We have become our own worst enemies
All with our own ulterior motives
And on a collision course with reality

Submitted on 2005-09-18 12:11:36 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  A nice poem about the difference between the artificially constructed self that we see in the mirror that acts as a barrier and the inner being. An interesting use of alliteration on the 'd's and 'm's.
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Comradenessie
| Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
  remember what I said long ago we have to [censored] up before we learn the real truth...sometimes it is trhe only way...I think you rae very much on your way of becomning a veryt smart woman of the world and hell if ya get any smarter you aren't going to want to associate with us pebodys...Na but you are understanding that inside is so many of our just past selves evolving often into the NEW you-and this happens often as often as you go out there and do something new or experience something that you never did before-its all good there arre a few points in the piece I am not to sure if you havew worded them right but I got your p[opint and I like How you are figuring the world and yourself out...easy huh?
LT
| Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
  mmmm what to say? what to say?
You know i love it, umm maby i just read it wrong but: "The disguises the real you" shouldnt it be "that disguises the real you." ??
Just wondering. I like the ryhming skeem but i like the poem best as a whole. I dont have much to say except that you are an ausome writer. I also wanted to say u rock.
Keep on bein urslef!
patrick/liam
| Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
  Vanity is what I think your trying to convey. On the other hand it could be a self realization piece that we are but mere mortals.

I think you could divide it into verses to sustain moods or flow, well thats just me. Insanely wicked piece... i like it :)
| Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wakethedead | [ Reply to This ]
  very nice. yes I agree with alot of the things here we can be our own worst enemies certain events can happen that make us do more damage to ourselves than anything else. It's the revelation of the true image of oneself. we see something in someone else and hate it. then later we must see if that thing we hate exist in our own selves, which is where the mirror comes into play. very honest write. I like it alot and shall keep it on principle alone,

~mike
| Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]

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