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    dots Submission Name: False Reflectiondots
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    Author: shmuzzelle
    ASL Info:    20/girl/canada
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 261/134/30
    Words: 108
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       Yeah, I'm not totally sure where this came from. I just started writing, and this is what came out of it.


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    dotsFalse Reflectiondots
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    Look in the mirror, what do you see?
    The carefully formulated exterior
    The disguises the real you
    Inside you are nothing more than
    Anyone else, we're all the same
    Underneath it all
    Living within our carefuly designed
    Ideal dream worlds
    Trying to protect ourselves
    From the land of unknown
    What is forgotten is that
    Uncertainty can bring something that is unexpected,
    Something that is beneficial
    But will never be discovered
    Eventually the dream will disintegrate
    Leaving behind the shell of our
    Former selves, empty
    Discarded like a newspaper
    We have become our own worst enemies
    All with our own ulterior motives
    And on a collision course with reality




    Submitted on 2005-09-18 12:11:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      A nice poem about the difference between the artificially constructed self that we see in the mirror that acts as a barrier and the inner being. An interesting use of alliteration on the 'd's and 'm's.
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    Comradenessie
    | Posted on 2006-02-09 00:00:00 | by comradenessie | [ Reply to This ]
      remember what I said long ago we have to [censored] up before we learn the real truth...sometimes it is trhe only way...I think you rae very much on your way of becomning a veryt smart woman of the world and hell if ya get any smarter you aren't going to want to associate with us pebodys...Na but you are understanding that inside is so many of our just past selves evolving often into the NEW you-and this happens often as often as you go out there and do something new or experience something that you never did before-its all good there arre a few points in the piece I am not to sure if you havew worded them right but I got your p[opint and I like How you are figuring the world and yourself out...easy huh?
    LT
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by LameMansTerms | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm what to say? what to say?
    You know i love it, umm maby i just read it wrong but: "The disguises the real you" shouldnt it be "that disguises the real you." ??
    Just wondering. I like the ryhming skeem but i like the poem best as a whole. I dont have much to say except that you are an ausome writer. I also wanted to say u rock.
    Keep on bein urslef!
    patrick/liam
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by patrick o_riley | [ Reply to This ]
      Vanity is what I think your trying to convey. On the other hand it could be a self realization piece that we are but mere mortals.

    I think you could divide it into verses to sustain moods or flow, well thats just me. Insanely wicked piece... i like it :)
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wakethedead | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice. yes I agree with alot of the things here we can be our own worst enemies certain events can happen that make us do more damage to ourselves than anything else. It's the revelation of the true image of oneself. we see something in someone else and hate it. then later we must see if that thing we hate exist in our own selves, which is where the mirror comes into play. very honest write. I like it alot and shall keep it on principle alone,

    ~mike
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by inspirit999 | [ Reply to This ]


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