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    dots Submission Name: Drama In Real Lifedots
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    Author: beatthedrum
    ASL Info:    55- F - Southern CA USA
    Elite Ratio:    4.18 - 881/810/122
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 602
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    Description:
       Katrina and more.

    My day job had numerous facilities and employees in the Gulf region. I have been distantly involved in searching for the people and planning our recovery efforts. Till now this has been too real and too close to write about.

    Disasters have come into our lives for many years. Our concerns seem to be relevant to the geography. It also appears to be short lived.
    Perhaps someday we will see all the suffering as the same regardless of race, sex, national orientation or any of the other things that separate us.

    I have to also wonder if any of the politicians look at New Orleans or Mississippi and compare it to the desolation our bombs and wars have caused. Do bodies in Baghdad count the same as bodies on Bourbon Street?

    Just my thought on how we view suffering. The theme of this is very near my piece Hear That?


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    dotsDrama In Real Lifedots
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    Curtain opens on a scene of
    desolation busted bubbles
    security folded in knots
    stomach and neck tensions twisting
    irreverence of innocents
    searching through rubble for what was.

    They are wandering in places
    once foreign and still wondering
    at a distance if they can ever
    salvage a life of normalcy.
    Wearing the mask of tragedy
    shaping frozen frown dialogue.

    Improvisational and free
    movement sets scenes of suffering.
    By bomb or by wind the show blows
    into town and has been on the
    road in the longest tour for years,
    playing command performances.

    Indonesia, Somalia,
    South Asia, Congo, Palestine,
    Baghdad, Kabul, Oklahoma,
    London, Beirut, New York City,
    New Orleans and then summer stock
    in some obscure smaller venues.

    Each staging features local casts
    of fledgling amateur actors.
    This is their chance for attention
    before the world audience.
    All wish they had skipped auditions.

    No matter how many times it
    has played, it continues to be
    a tissue soaking tear-jerker.




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      Wow it was realy insightful, beautiful stanzas but I am sure you have heard the whole role of compliments lol. The things that happen in life are no different than the other horrible events in the past. They call americas the new Rome, perhaps the reason for all wars is that we question ourself, and our brothers.
    | Posted on 2005-11-21 00:00:00 | by winterdove | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent poem you have written. You capture the sheer tragic horror that so many people have experienced in so many different ways. This is a very powerful poem. My favorite stanza which really is tremendous:

    Each staging features local casts
    of fledgling amateur actors.
    This is their chance for attention
    before the world audience.
    All wish they had skipped auditions.

    What a great way to express this! I think that is brilliantly expressed and so true! And the final stanza here is great as well. No matter how many times it is seen, it is just a tragic as the first. Great write! Take care!

    Lorna
    | Posted on 2005-10-05 00:00:00 | by lmz | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good very good i liked how you put the worlds disasters into a traveling show
    it is extremely creative and very well written
    please let me know when your next post is up as i like your style

    take care
    | Posted on 2005-10-04 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      My words of advice to you are for you to keep up the strong writing as well as keep on telling the truth about everday life.

    Read one of my poems and give me insight on how to become a better writer!
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a unique way to portray the relentless onslaught of holocaust that seems to be more and more frequent lately.

    I read your "on stage" descriptions with such a grim smile, as I knew you weren't trying to be funny.

    An excellent write, I loved it.

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      No words can describe the power of this.

    If for only a moment we could all see, open our eyes and understand...the reality of what you are saying...Beat the Drums Chrystine you are so right and understand this all to well - I feel the beat and have known this melody for so long...you have said a lifetime of wisdom in this piece, and said it strong and well...
    Thank you for your insight...may others see it

    Lisa
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by ravenwolf68 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh my, this is a tragic look into the depths of suffering, no matter where it happens.

    Each staging features local casts
    of fledling amateur actors.
    This is their chance for attention
    before the world audience.
    All wish they had skipped auditions.

    Suddenly thrust into a role they never asked for.

    No critiquing here. This is very powerful. The world as a stage, and we are all players.

    +Jo
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by whisperslove | [ Reply to This ]


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