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    dots Submission Name: Forgetting Paindots
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    Author: Red_reaper
    ASL Info:    14/f/inside a blueberry
    Elite Ratio:    5.94 - 143/76/20
    Words: 72
    Class/Type: Poetry/Cutting or Mutilation
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    dotsForgetting Paindots
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    Take your blade
    Push it deep
    Just forget
    Watch the blood seep

    Just for a moment
    Your not you
    Everything's alright
    Life can start anew

    Sometimes you wish
    The world would fade
    All sorrow erased
    No mistakes were made

    You could just eternally grin
    Stop thinking
    To float
    Let you stop sinking

    Come with me
    Let me set you free
    You'll never be alone
    Just wait and see




    Submitted on 2005-09-18 14:36:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      let me just say this at first, Bravo at putting this into such tremendous words. I love this and i will be adding this to my favorites. This describes it all, the entire way of thought when one is commiting the art of cutting. It was described in a manor i have been searching for for some time now. and here it is. Because this is what the scar is all about, forgetting your problems and woes, if only for a instant they are gone. and this says it. Bravo!

    Di
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Di Re Rakord | [ Reply to This ]
      You could just eternally grin
    Stop thinking
    To float
    Let you stop sinking
    ok that stanza needs some more work, the third line throws the whole thing off, but overall it was one of the better cutter poems that i have read...good job

    ~adalae
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by lifeNsoul1224 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think that this is one of the better cutting poems I've read, it has a flow and doesn't read like it was written by a 5 year old child.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Akili | [ Reply to This ]
      pretty good piece. i thought that some of it has been said before, but it's still relevant. the fourth stanza's last line is akward to me and the last stanza seems to have been written ona whim and for the purpose of rhyming words. good effort, though.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]


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