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    dots Submission Name: Pandoradots
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    Author: wretched_muse
    ASL Info:    20/f/OH
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 182/205/64
    Words: 126
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
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    Description:
       inner thoughts. plz comments on the work.


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    dotsPandoradots
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    Life sucks for me, yet no one chooses to see my pain. Teenage hurt is all they say, thinking I’ll be ok. My pains run far and wide as my heart sink’s deeper. I want out. I yearn to be free of all you causers of my pain who choice not to see. My marks are more then teenage years, they'er the marks of all people using me as there Pandora of secrets. But my pains are mingled in with their tears and to let my pains out lets all secrets free. I’ve intertwined self with to many problems. I need to be free. Some one tell me to open my box so I can be free before all dies with me.




    Submitted on 2005-09-18 19:28:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm...sounds like someone spread too thin by being too kind and all around bring their problems to her and neglect that this person may need a shoulder to cry on too. Like a wise man once told me...Ya cant take care of others if you cant take care of yourself. Maybe this person should "close the box" for a while and concentrate on themselves a bit. Heck, thats something everyone should do once in a while. Anyway, I am rambling now.

    OH,

    their the marks of all

    I think that should be they're instead of their.

    There...yo grammar lesson for the day. Have a good one and chin up. And smile, smile, smile.
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]
      This is certainly wretched all right...at least you're telling the right people here...coz WE CARE ABOUT YOU!
    I'm also glad you can put your thoughts into words, I won't go into poetical improvements, I'll simply tell you that you're not a lost cause if you can think as per above...actually, you're on the way up!

    Now go get 'em!

    Be Happy

    Graeme
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by wewak11 | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad and lovely. A real spout of misery. I admire you for being able to write about it. I would like to tell you that everything gets bettter when you are an adult, but that is not true. You just get better at hiding the pain. I love the name Pandora. Can you remember what other than plagues and misery came out of the box? Hope...
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by sistersinister | [ Reply to This ]



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