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    dots Submission Name: Back in the Pastdots
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    Author: Suicidalchild51
    ASL Info:    17/f/wa
    Elite Ratio:    3.31 - 411/333/83
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       My Family is Fighting like worse thaen ever...I FUCKNG WANNA KILL!!! KILLL!!!


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    dotsBack in the Pastdots
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    As soon as were done recoverin,
    All they do is sit there and fight again,
    Wonderin where my life has been,
    Wishin i was in a covonent.

    Watchin my life fly pat me
    Thinkin of how my life should be,
    Keepin everything hidden inside,
    Not tellin my friends everything,
    Not tellin them lies.

    Wished I could go back,
    Save us from my Dads attack,
    Lettin us live a unbroken life,
    So I could call my real Parents,
    Husband and Wife.

    And they could call us their kids,
    And we could live with them,
    Not goin through whats present
    And forgeting our credits.

    Now were back in the past,
    Everyone is at war,
    In Iraq and at home,
    I think this might be,
    Our world war 4.

    2 vs. 2
    Him me and you
    Who knew a world war,
    Could be done by four,
    But everyone gets killed here...
    Theres no winner or loser nor a tie,
    We'll do anything to win,
    Who cares, it all ends up in crys,
    We all die inside,
    Die in our hearts,
    Kill me all together,
    Give it to me hard...





    Submitted on 2005-09-18 21:52:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Watchin my life fly pat me
    Thinkin of how my life should be,
    Keepin everything hidden inside,
    Not tellin my friends everything,
    Not tellin them lies.

    i can relate 2 these lines the most. cuz stuff happens at home and even ur best friends don't know about it cuz u keep some things in the darkest part of u, the part that u never show. oh by the way, u mispelled "past". good write babe.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, that was pretty good. sounds like my life.lol. This was a great write. Dont let your family stress you out though. It only makes you psychotic (look at me). Just keep in mind that they will die soon.lol. Good Job!
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      like ur icon i was i nice write son it sounds like a [censored]ed up situation but wut is a person to do but i like it great write


    heavy knowledge aka chaz
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by heavy knowledge | [ Reply to This ]


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