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    dots Submission Name: Ouch!!!! U cut me deepdots
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    Author: heavy knowledge
    ASL Info:    15/m/slidell, L.a.(N.O.)
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 106/156/34
    Words: 260
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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       this was about a gurl from back in the day but its always in the back of my mind if u know wut i meen


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    dotsOuch!!!! U cut me deepdots
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    I'm glad i fought through ur lies cast by ur eyes
    Before this became the closer to our demise
    All wrapped up and confused about wut u got between those thighs
    U get a gift in that but ur gift of deception i would not buy
    But still i pray
    For the one day
    Demise, lies, and cries wont be an option or choice
    Because i lie u never heard come from this voice
    But my words i do not share
    Because ur mouth runs with lies like a snare
    Even more it runs like a hare
    But it is over so i wont go there
    But i will go back to back to the time u said u Where going out with ur girls
    So i went out with my boy and found u kissing Another guy in ur twisted world
    Now between u and me love aint nothing but a 4 letter word
    That, in this relationship should go unheard
    Because in this relationship u ran a relay
    I even put down hurtles and u ran around them for days
    While i watch the time pass away
    But im tired of the games u play
    Instead of 200, u take a piece of my heart as u pass go
    I have all the broken heart cards and u yell uno
    And the last card u have is a draw four
    U FUCKED ANOTHER NIGGER U SILLY WH---
    But i wont call u that because i love u
    and i will put no one but god above u
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      cheat write huh. i don't remember being told about this.keeping secrets huh? just kidding. this was a pretty good write. i liked the last lines the most. don't mind amber's language. the girl is crazy.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting piece! + interesting icon! what can I say?I loved the flow of the poem although it gets a bit too long and it kinda bother you.But ye very original i HOPE u never cheated on anyone because if u did I will have to write a poem about u ! :P

    melx
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by meletn | [ Reply to This ]
      ha ha umm... It was good.. I cant really say much about it, ya know half way through I kinda had to scratch my head and look at the floor (I have done my fair share of cheating). So... umm, yeah Im gonna stop typing now.

    Drea
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Drea | [ Reply to This ]
      sHit sun!that was the sHit!OMG!that was like the koolest ever!your fuCkin good at this sHit man! hell!i know how gettin cheated on feels!man if i could have told him this like you did!Damn! d be like kooler than you!lol!

    U [censored]ED ANOTHER NIGGER U SILLY WH-
    But i wont call u that because i love u

    that was the best! wow! sHit! i dont know what to say but...Damn FuCk Cunt sHit fUck asS CuNt Licker mother fucKer!that was the bomb!loved it!lol!

    XxXSuicidalxxChildXxX
    | Posted on 2005-09-18 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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