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voices n my head (my mistakes)

Author: Drea
ASL Info:    18/f/nowhere
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Pissed off. And I needed to write something even though it doesnt make sense. If you already read this and posted, my bad I had to re post it.

voices n my head (my mistakes)

You think you know me. But you dont know shit about me. Yeah I may be a bitch, but I have reason. you dont know shit about my life, my past. What I've been through.

You think, you can help me. You think you can relate. Well guess what. I dont want your fucking advice or your help. I want you to leave me alone. You know what you can do for me, fall over, die and rot in the fiery pits of hell.

OH, daddy you want to call me now. Your concerned well.. why dont you be concerned and call more than once a fucking decade. You think I may be suicidal. Oh whats the matter, life insurance doesnt cover for suicide. fuck you!

No. I cant make bomb threats about the school. It's a good thing I wasnt serious, or that could have been a court case. It's okay cause Im only in the 10th freakin grade I didnt know any better. But now I do so it shouldnt happen again right???

Hey, I cant hold someone at gun point, dont I know thats wrong. Gosh, I scared them. I should apologize. But it's not my fault he started it. He got blood on my new shirt. It was white. It wasnt my fault My hand barley even grazed the trigger. oops my bad. Guess I got to get back in the white jacket huh???

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  wow very stong But its good i liked the ending of it but ya the first part was good as well but its sad like dawn has said i like to write to express my pain as well i also can sort of relate
| Posted on 2006-02-26 00:00:00 | by choirbandgeek | [ Reply to This ]
  So very violent , I like it. Sometimes I want to people to go away and stop asking questions. I get really aggitated but I keep my emotions bottled tightly. Not like you though. Good rant. Very emotional.
| Posted on 2005-10-01 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]
  wow!!!! sooooo strong soooooooo powerful, im 15 and im a female and well i think i know what you mean, maybe i didnt do everything that the poem states, but in some parts. one way or the other i cant relate to it very good job! it makes perfect sense, i started reading didnt wanna marvelous! the part that i most like and i even thought it was kinda funny was part of the gun and the blood in your white shirt that was kinda funny, but what do i opinion, very cool....scary in some parts but i understand your madness!
great job!
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by anita_89 | [ Reply to This ]
  I am going to comment here, I feel that your writing is very sad. It is clear to me that you have a given talent to write and to express your pain. Having a mother myself that was so caught up in herself I can totally relate to that. To this day she is still caught up in herself and cannot see any futher than herself. Sad but true. You say you don't care but deep inside you do. I know I was, I am, the same way. In fact to this day I am the still that way. I claim I don't care because it is a great way to cover up the pain. Keep on writing. God Bless, Dawn
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Dawnyd | [ Reply to This ]

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