I think the first line is the best, I like how you take something so seemingly finite as death and give it immortality through the cries of other people. I thought that was clever. Opening with a paradox is very intriguing to the reader.
One can be obsessed with death.Death is'ntwhat it always seems though.It could be a parting internally of an indiviual.I don't dislike or have a problem with howyou put at all bc we all eventually go and we all definitely look at death differentltfromone another.So I don'tthink this is referringto departing the earth and dying physically.I believe when you say deathyou talking about feelings inside of you dying and youwishing they'd go away.Another reason why this poem is in the category ofdepression.So that's what I believe your talking about here.But as a writer you have displayed the ability make it officially stated as the finaloutcome of life more than somethingdark and hideous.So I won't say I don'tlike but it is what it is. Peace and Inspiration