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    dots Submission Name: Monday Morning Prayerdots
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    Author: Raivn
    ASL Info:    33/f/al
    Elite Ratio:    4.28 - 1222/916/231
    Words: 266
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       I miss Jaz and Tony both so much... But most of all I miss the three of us together-my one and only real family.


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    These thoughts pour through my mind,
    Like the sands through my hourglass.
    The one I got for Christmas at his grandmothers' house,
    On a day over nine months in the past.
    I feel despair and isolation.
    I feel salt burn my face.
    I think of good times gone by.
    I dream of happiness in a different place.
    I feel my sister crying out to me,
    In a way that only she knows how.
    I once was her protector, her assurance of hope.
    I'm afraid I can't be that now.
    The tears keep stinging my face,
    Some for her and some for him.
    The two people that I cannot live without,
    But now it feels I'm losing both of them.
    I don't know how to get through the pain
    That greets me every day.
    I'm slowly dying inside.
    I'm afraid I'm drifting away.
    And no one knows, because I put on a smile.
    I don't let anyone see my tears.
    But I spend too many hours alone,
    Surrounded by all of my fears.
    I stood so tall in the glory of their love.
    Now his is gone, and she's so far away.
    They were my love, my family, my home,
    The happiness for which I would always pray.
    I can't be complete without the two of them,
    He was my love and she was my heart.
    And you can't grow without your love
    And you can't live when you're ripped apart.
    I end this with a solemn plea
    To an infathomable God above:
    Please bring my family back to me.
    Please return the ones I love.




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      Well I like it...and you know what, I am crazy about Cory but he isn't makin me happy and the only reason is because I miss you...because there is this BIG void in my life...I have to know if you are going to the Big spring Jam cause momma may let me stay the night with Cory and go with him...I mean his mom is actually getting me a tivket with him so you don't have to pay for me but you can still go and meet me and stuff so yea...

    Jazmine
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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