I'm always telling her to be herself
but am i truly myself?
giving her a lecture on being herself
no matter what anyone says or thinks
hipocritical
Sadly i find myself caring
about what you think of me
O what has happened to my strength?
what has happened to the wall that i've built around myself?
my icy heart has melted and now i feel the pain
Why can't you accept me for who I am?
surely you do not think that i have strayed
that i have become evil?
has my quest of finding myself not really come to an end?
has my soul become remorseful?
Verily i tried to be in vain
for nothing pleases the people
I look gratefully at this candle glowing bright in this darkness
I don't need to prove my self to you
I do not need to cry over the things you say
I will keep being myself
for my creator hath made me
for He alone knows my intentions
for Him alone
I need to be
for Him alone
I need to care
and to Him I shall return
"I will keep being myself for my creator hath made me for he alone knows my intentions for him alone I need to be for him alone i need to care and to him i shall return"
WHO IS THAT GIRL YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT...HMMM?! I'm just kidding . . . don't answer that one. I have too many poems on my favorites. I'm deleting one of the others and adding this one. Your poems are all so gorgeous. Keep it up Grim. I just love how you're trying not to care about what the rest of he world think and, just to let you know, you are one of the strongest people I know. This poem has so much to do with life, and I love the fact that all you care about is pleasing our one and only GOD. You know? It's my turn to lecture you . . . don't ever care what THEY think. Not all family and friends may understand you but just remember . . . all that matters is that GOD understands you, and if you have doubts that HE won't . . . DON'T! Cuz there is no need to.
the way the ending went felt cool to read i read it a few times actualy...lol it was pretty cool i like how u talk about him is "him" yourself? its cool
Rythem 8/10 cool words 8/10 creativity 9/10 orginality 9/10 over all 8.5/10
Good work, I love spiritual poetry. I am afflicted with a tendency to care way too much about what other people think of me, so I really related. Well, take care, shalini
nicely written. a few grammar mistakes, but none that drove me mad by any means. i think we can all relate to the subject matter here. everyone says they don't care what others think, but we all do in some way or the other. we all want acception somehow or another. this is a great relative piece. good effort.
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