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Be


Author: darkness
ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524 /218 /40
Words: 203
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Be yourself.


Be



I'm always telling her to be herself
but am i truly myself?
giving her a lecture on being herself
no matter what anyone says or thinks

hipocritical
Sadly i find myself caring
about what you think of me

O what has happened to my strength?
what has happened to the wall that i've built around myself?
my icy heart has melted and now i feel the pain

Why can't you accept me for who I am?
surely you do not think that i have strayed
that i have become evil?
has my quest of finding myself not really come to an end?
has my soul become remorseful?

Verily i tried to be in vain
for nothing pleases the people

I look gratefully at this candle glowing bright in this darkness
I don't need to prove my self to you
I do not need to cry over the things you say

I will keep being myself
for my creator hath made me
for He alone knows my intentions
for Him alone
I need to be
for Him alone
I need to care
and to Him I shall return






Submitted on 2005-09-19 14:32:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  "I will keep being myself
for my creator hath made me
for he alone knows my intentions
for him alone
I need to be
for him alone
i need to care
and to him i shall return"


that is my favorite part


fana
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  i knoow who is that girl???

but yes she should be herself
| Posted on 2006-07-10 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
  WHO IS THAT GIRL YOU WERE TALKING ABOUT...HMMM?! I'm just kidding . . . don't answer that one. I have too many poems on my favorites. I'm deleting one of the others and adding this one. Your poems are all so gorgeous. Keep it up Grim. I just love how you're trying not to care about what the rest of he world think and, just to let you know, you are one of the strongest people I know. This poem has so much to do with life, and I love the fact that all you care about is pleasing our one and only GOD. You know? It's my turn to lecture you . . . don't ever care what THEY think. Not all family and friends may understand you but just remember . . . all that matters is that GOD understands you, and if you have doubts that HE won't . . . DON'T! Cuz there is no need to.

Much Love,
Unperfect
| Posted on 2005-12-09 00:00:00 | by UnPerfect | [ Reply to This ]
  the way the ending went felt cool to read i read it a few times actualy...lol it was pretty cool i like how u talk about him is "him" yourself? its cool

Rythem 8/10
cool words 8/10
creativity 9/10
orginality 9/10
over all 8.5/10

Trevor...~
| Posted on 2006-03-07 00:00:00 | by goomaster03 | [ Reply to This ]
  This is a lovely writing, keep it up. We often turn to others to see ourselves instead of looking inside our souls. I like it!
| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Aphrodite Dream | [ Reply to This ]
  Good work, I love spiritual poetry. I am afflicted with a tendency to care way too much about what other people think of me, so I really related. Well, take care,
shalini
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by sbridges | [ Reply to This ]
  nicely written. a few grammar mistakes, but none that drove me mad by any means. i think we can all relate to the subject matter here. everyone says they don't care what others think, but we all do in some way or the other. we all want acception somehow or another. this is a great relative piece. good effort.
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by caster | [ Reply to This ]


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