Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Bittersweet Lullabies:Part 2dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Sarah Leger
    ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436/387/80
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1063
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 587



    Description:
       just what the first line says:
    Don't ever leave the one you love for the one you like.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsBittersweet Lullabies:Part 2dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Never leave the one you love
    for the one you like
    Left alone that stormy night
    -kept cold
    -alone
    Dreams of Bittersweet Lullabies
    -hungry
    -sore
    my heart is tore
    He can't help
    Because he won't
    Never to see me cry
    Too blind to see me die
    It's over now
    And he doesn't know why
    Mark left in the skin
    Bled smooth
    Bled deep
    It's the ocean I weep
    Done now
    Killed by sorrow
    It's the one I loved
    who dies tomorrow




    Submitted on 2005-09-19 16:14:31     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      i like this poem it shows the true evil of love. the end though is different it shows you hide emotions and stilll carry out your feelings for other people.

    the last three stansas is it that you love sorrow and it will die on you or is it the one you love that dies?

    eternally
    Ace
    | Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh deary. This is quite a thinker. Makes me wanna think. Why you bleed? Wait, who bleed? No blood. Only debbie spill the blood. Not you Nor jeremy. Nor anyone else. Only her is alowed to spill devons blood. haha. Good write...Although its got me thinkin..Karens bad. Making you think and all.

    Fukk Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    74893

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry