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Bittersweet Lullabies:Part 2


Author: Sarah Leger
ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl
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Words: 81
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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just what the first line says:
Don't ever leave the one you love for the one you like.


Bittersweet Lullabies:Part 2



Never leave the one you love
for the one you like
Left alone that stormy night
-kept cold
-alone
Dreams of Bittersweet Lullabies
-hungry
-sore
my heart is tore
He can't help
Because he won't
Never to see me cry
Too blind to see me die
It's over now
And he doesn't know why
Mark left in the skin
Bled smooth
Bled deep
It's the ocean I weep
Done now
Killed by sorrow
It's the one I loved
who dies tomorrow




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  i like this poem it shows the true evil of love. the end though is different it shows you hide emotions and stilll carry out your feelings for other people.

the last three stansas is it that you love sorrow and it will die on you or is it the one you love that dies?

eternally
Ace
| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
  Oh deary. This is quite a thinker. Makes me wanna think. Why you bleed? Wait, who bleed? No blood. Only debbie spill the blood. Not you Nor jeremy. Nor anyone else. Only her is alowed to spill devons blood. haha. Good write...Although its got me thinkin..Karens bad. Making you think and all.

Fukk Love from Within
| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]


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