Bittersweet Lullabies:Part 2

Author: Sarah Leger ASL Info:    15.f.kissimmee,Fl Elite Ratio:    3.74 - 436 /387 /80 Words: 81

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Bittersweet Lullabies:Part 2

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Never leave the one you love for the one you like Left alone that stormy night -kept cold -alone Dreams of Bittersweet Lullabies -hungry -sore my heart is tore He can't help Because he won't Never to see me cry Too blind to see me die It's over now And he doesn't know why Mark left in the skin Bled smooth Bled deep It's the ocean I weep Done now Killed by sorrow It's the one I loved who dies tomorrow

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i like this poem it shows the true evil of love. the end though is different it shows you hide emotions and stilll carry out your feelings for other people. the last three stansas is it that you love sorrow and it will die on you or is it the one you love that dies? eternally Ace

| Posted on 2005-09-28 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]

Oh deary. This is quite a thinker. Makes me wanna think. Why you bleed? Wait, who bleed? No blood. Only debbie spill the blood. Not you Nor jeremy. Nor anyone else. Only her is alowed to spill devons blood. haha. Good write...Although its got me thinkin..Karens bad. Making you think and all. Fukk Love from Within

| Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]

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