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    dots Submission Name: Step by Step(Edited)dots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 959
    Average Vote:    3.0000
    Bytes: 513



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       I added more for those of you who requested it! Hope you like it!


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    dotsStep by Step(Edited)dots
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    Bit by bit
    things start to fall into place
    Piece by piece
    the puzzle begins to take shape
    Step by step
    life continues at a smooth pace
    and
    Little by little
    a smile forms upon her face

    Hand and hand
    they will walk along
    Heart to heart
    together they are one
    Soul to soul
    they will grow to be strong
    Eye to eye
    they will fix what goes wrong
    Day to day
    they will continue to carry on




    Submitted on 2005-09-19 16:26:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Alissa, i loved this one so much, it almost made me cry. it really gives me some hope in life and love, that's what i was thinking while i was reading. so optimistic*
    liz
    | Posted on 2006-03-16 00:00:00 | by myonlysalvation | [ Reply to This ]
      I think it is beging you to expand this and take her on more of an emotional journey. Another 3 - 4 verses please ! That will make it even better.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this poem alot. Short sweet and to the point! This poem may be short but at least gets the point across. You really have a way with words that I admire and wish I could do. In the future I hope and plan to read more of your work to get a better sense of what good poetry is. This too is going into my faves. I really enjoy reading your work alot.
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
      This seemed a little too simple. You didnt seem to try as much as Im sure you could. But good write. I got the messege prefectly fine.

    Fukk Love from Within
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by Thinkingofyou | [ Reply to This ]


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