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    dots Submission Name: Whirlwind of Emotionsdots
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    Author: Geraldine
    ASL Info:    25
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 241/296/80
    Words: 80
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 830
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 574



    Description:
       Another cheesy piece...sorry, I can only write good poetry when I am sad...right now I am very happy! Bare with me...


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    dotsWhirlwind of Emotionsdots
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    ~Sadness when he doesn't call
    ~Excitement when he does
    ~Nervousness when he is around
    ~Longing when wishing he was
    ~Curiosity while talking with him
    ~Anger when he talks to her
    ~Happiness when he's holding me
    ~Anticipation right before
    ~Love when he is kissing me
    ~Disappointment when he stops
    ~Lust when he's on the bottom
    ~Euphoria when on top
    All of these feelings
    fill my mind to the brim,
    My head is a whirlwind of emotions
    everytime I am around him




    Submitted on 2005-09-19 16:32:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very descriptive and you portrayed your whirlwind very well indeed. It was very evocative and very good. It flowed easily and hung together superbly well - well done. It was not cheesy at all.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      See I really love this poem because this is how I feel with my bf! Every line in this poem basically says all for my relationship, however me and my bf are good and strong. I would not change a god damned thing about this poem because this is how you feel about that special someone and I feel that everyone should know how good relationships are run!
    This is going into my faves.
    ~Krystina~
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by takenspiritwind | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked the poem and how it was so graphic and descriptive but i really didn't like the " ~ " in the poem they distractedme alot ... Alittle too much.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by nobody6 | [ Reply to This ]
      Nice and deep and somehow kind of graphic which I have no problem against beacuse obviously I am all for that... One thing though... If he is with her then are you the girl to the side? Anyways good write I enjoyed it and hope to read more of your writtings... Thanks and keep writting
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by josymanthegreat | [ Reply to This ]
      I have heard lots of similar pices. It is good and all, but after awhile you really get tired of it. your good and I know you could stand a chaleng. Go for it. challeng yourself.
    | Posted on 2005-10-03 00:00:00 | by _DeathBySofa_ | [ Reply to This ]


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