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    dots Submission Name: the twistdots
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    Author: Rue
    ASL Info:    16/F/the dark side
    Elite Ratio:    4.54 - 244/182/44
    Words: 119
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1036
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       The "Twist" Is like, a twist of fate, sort of thing. This is a very masochistic piece, one i wrote in a bout of depression.


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    I want to tie up my soul as a body and wrap it in thick chains
    I want to make good use of a butter knife, practice different pains.

    I'll watch myself bleed, tense and cry and squirm,
    I'll listen to my attempts at making freedom terms.

    But I won’t listen to myself because the torture's not enough,
    Criticisms prove it, but my thoughts are strong and soul is tough.

    Wading through a world of stone throwers and disbeliveers,
    Trying to break through a shield of over achievers.

    I want to write the laws of my will over gravel with blood from my wrist,
    Approach me with your queer devices and bow before the twist.




    Submitted on 2005-09-19 17:07:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow this was [censored] awesome again...I have to say I didn't expect much when I read the whole depression thing but this was super maso. great write! impressive;) I like hippie music>< lol.
    | Posted on 2006-01-04 00:00:00 | by silent_death12 | [ Reply to This ]
      What the hell is this, some cliché bull[censored] like every other pathetic child your age, come now, learn something of talent, maybe you could stop listening to over rated hippie music like the pussy doors and pf, and listen to some good metal, and mayne while your at it, go to school and learn how to write something that isnt so cliché. Come now , do you have talent?
    Or are you just another wanna be?

    -Cynyster Soviet Cyanide-
    | Posted on 2005-09-30 00:00:00 | by Black-Wall | [ Reply to This ]
      YaY !...This is very very good ...I kinda read your description and thought ...meh ...depression ...meh ...But it turned out to be a really good peice ...Butterknife....lol....i loved the mention of the butter knife :/ ...Im crazy like that ...Anyway ...good job
    | Posted on 2005-09-29 00:00:00 | by Krysti | [ Reply to This ]
      I love youuuuuuuuuu! -prances around like a likkle daisy flower child- Overachiever? Is that a slam at me? -pokes you- -pokes her own hectic crazy schedule- I love youuuuuu!
    ~Le Crowness
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Crow | [ Reply to This ]


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