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    dots Submission Name: Look the Other Waydots
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    Author: wakethedead
    ASL Info:    34/M/Ca
    Elite Ratio:    3.99 - 13/13/9
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Longing
    Total Views: 635
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 607



    Description:
       Iíve written this for my beloved wife. Finished recording it last 2003 and re-recorded it last year. Itís a simple song about chances and opportunity we have in the spur of the moment. Comments are very much welcome :)

    This song is included in my personal CD release.


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    dotsLook the Other Waydots
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    Our system of events
    Is it measured by the interval between all the trials?
    Between dimensions that would enable us
    at the same point where we opt to cover

    Where did all the time go

    Separate the past, present and future
    At the moment that something might happen
    A period during which somebody is alive,
    Productive cycle in existence

    Where did all the time go

    Look the other way
    It could pass us by and leave us behind
    Time is not our friend
    We can let it fly or keep it inside




    Submitted on 2005-09-19 18:32:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really liked this poem. it kind of confused me, but it left this kind of mysticysm. i like how you set up the struggle against time, but i dont really see the connection to longing. i really like it, though. its got that mystic feel to it.
    | Posted on 2005-09-19 00:00:00 | by brokenroses | [ Reply to This ]


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