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    dots Submission Name: Angeldots

    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 178
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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       Tell me if you like it and give me advice on what i need to work on and just keep it real!!!

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    An angel is someone who is polite, sweet and beautiful

    An angel is someone who cares for you in a special way despite what others say they like you for you not something you're trying to be

    Just being yourself and not changing while everything else around you does

    Angel that I've waited so long for but still ashamed of what you might think of me yet there are so many things I want you to see

    Angel that is dear and precious and if I lose you I don't know what I'll do

    Your steps are as heavenly as you walk taking extreme caution with every step you take

    You're the angel that I want to hold in my arms forever more

    My dear angel I'll take you under my wings and we will soar

    Angel who I hope to spend time with and hope you will become mine

    My dearest angel please give me a chance to show you who I really am

    Submitted on 2005-09-20 06:28:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Such a beautifull writing! WOW! I really liked the flow and how it talks about angels.
    I love angels. I am married to a Angel.
    And I love him so much.

    Keep up the great work!

    | Posted on 2009-08-28 00:00:00 | by totojane03 | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. The repetition of angel was a bit overused, but it was still good. I can relate to this, but from the "angel" stand point. Any girl may seem heavenly but she always has a little hell in her. If you're going to put her upon the angelic pedestal, you must be prepared to stand there with her because an angel can love nothing less than an angel. I hope everything works out for you. It'd be nice to see Cupid not mess up. Keep up the great work, and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2008-09-27 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it and i definitely know how you feel! but here's some constructive criticism: try to use "an angel" a little bit less...otherwise it really good! Keep up the awesome work!
    take care
    | Posted on 2005-09-24 00:00:00 | by PrincessDoom13 | [ Reply to This ]

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