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    dots Submission Name: 2nd add on: bitch now you deaddots
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    Author: maninthemirror
    ASL Info:    17/m/arkansas
    Elite Ratio:    2.64 - 224/318/109
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
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    dots2nd add on: bitch now you deaddots
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    peple look down on me for what I write/
    But what can I say, I walk away from the light/It ain't my fault, but I take responsibility/
    With open arms, like love for a child, I do this willingly/
    yet what I say is from from love and that's the way it will be/
    I choke you by the neck, yell in your ear so you will hear me/
    I'm cuttin' bitches up with the infer-red and shit/
    your arm, your legs, and dick fell off, so bitch you dead and shit




    Submitted on 2005-09-20 16:30:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      peple look down on me for what I write/
    But what can I say, I walk away from the light/It ain't my fault, but I take responsibility/
    With open arms, like love for a child, I do this willingly/

    i liked this add on more than the other one. those lines stuck out the most 4 me. it seems like u walked outta the popular circle to be urself. the responsibility-willingly analogy was really good too.
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by unknown soldier | [ Reply to This ]
      hehe i like the end..."dead and sHit." nice i loved it! hehehehe! i fUckin really loved it! idk why tho! that sukk to have your dick gonde...damm... i love the violence in your poems...they make me feel like punching someone **punches J and runs** you wouldnt hit me back...but im still gonna run...u know...just to be safe...lol! i loved the poem great write man...


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    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Suicidalchild51 | [ Reply to This ]


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