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    dots Submission Name: Calm Before The Stormdots
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    Author: withblindedeyez
    ASL Info:    19/m/nc
    Elite Ratio:    2.57 - 83/121/58
    Words: 235
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Angry
    Total Views: 191
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1404



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       i just don't give a shit anymore.


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    dotsCalm Before The Stormdots
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    Silence rings out over everything
    As we stare into each other’s eyes
    The anger is boiling up inside, searching
    For a way to come out, it slowly takes
    physical form, in your words, and the silence
    Is nothing more the calm before the storm.

    As the words slide out from behind your teeth
    I bite my tongue in fear, and you catch the taste of defeat
    Over me, A smile breaks over your face,
    Laughs soaked in victory. You point you finger at me,
    You throw all my weakness back at me, and no
    Matter what you always seem you break me apart.

    Another day, another silence is playing
    Another fight explodes from behind it, and
    Nothing is gained, but broken bones and bruises,
    Paint me black and blue, Erase me and redraw me
    In a broken form, My life exist in the calm before
    The storm.

    After the lighting strikes, and the clouds clear
    When the fear is drained away, and these bruises
    Fade, You still can’t find the words to say, to heal
    The words that you said, So you start the fight
    Back up and I’ve had enough, fuck the calm before
    The storm, silence doesn’t ring out over everything
    This take my words will take physical form, and you’ll
    See how it feels to live in the calm before the storm.





    Submitted on 2005-09-20 21:30:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      It’s a very good poem. Third stanza I loved the most. Imaginary is great and flow is much better, easier than the rest of the poem. I think that you described the situation very good. You conveyed emotions (the anticipation, the fear –calm before the storm) in a very powerful way. Believe me, I know. I used to fight with my mother every day, we hated each other and it was terrible. But it’s all in the past. Now, we are like best friends. So, who ever is this person in your poem, I hope that one day you will stop fighting and understand each other much better.
    | Posted on 2005-09-22 00:00:00 | by Poly Jean | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very powerful poem, and I can feel and relate to that a lot, I think that you have a lot of potential, just keep doing what you do, and try new things, and you should do well
    Regards, Kalinda
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by Kalinda | [ Reply to This ]
      you spelled "clam" instead of "calm". it was a very angry piece. i could feel the rage in the words. i think that it would be better though if you used less commas and threw in some periods, to break it up a little bit. i think that the anger also distracted from the piece. it was kind of overwhelming in some places.
    | Posted on 2005-09-20 00:00:00 | by maquiladora | [ Reply to This ]



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