Somebody by solitary

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dots

<< | >>

Submission Name: Somebody dots

--------------------------------------------------------

Author:	solitary_cross
ASL Info:	19/female/Philippines
Elite Ratio:	3.4 - 92/107/24
Words:	109

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	804
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	685

Description:
This is about my friend whom I fell in love with but he has someone else. I still remained a faithful friend to him even though it hurts to realize that we can never be.

Somebody dots

-------------------------------------------

I see somebody walking towards me
His eyes looking into mine
Eyes that melted my heart away
Yet I know it is not mine to keep

I hear somebody talking to me
His voice silencing mine
He was talking about him, her and them
Yet there is no mention of my name

I feel somebody sitting beside me
His shoulder touching mine
His burdens pouring out like rain
Yet those tears were not cried for me

Still...

I see somebody right in front of me
I hear somebody calling out my name
I feel somebody grasping my hand tight

And that somebody is you.

Submitted on 2005-09-20 23:09:21 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

1: >_<
2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

||| Comments |||
  yelling my name and it was not him..

wondering about how hard it can be to be with some one and yet be not the 'one'

fancy life stuff. some how the emotions does not seem to flow out all so well, its very constrained.

| Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
  Sometimes in life, we have NO choice but to love the one you love from a distance. I can relate to that very well. A very good write.
| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  unrequited love id hard to deal with.. and I hope you learn to move one so that you can hear someone else calling your name.
the last part, what do you think of making it more fragmented?
Still...
you are
Standing right in front of me,
calling my name,
grasping my hand tight.
| Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]

Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

1. Be honest.
2. Try not to give only compliments.
3. How did it make you feel?
4. Why did it make you feel that way?
5. Which parts?
6. What distracted from the piece? 7. What was unclear?
8. What does it remind you of?
9. How could it be improved?
10. What would you have done differently?
11. What was your interpretation of it?
12. Does it feel original?

75044

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Enter your search terms Submit search form

Web www.eliteskills.com

[ Quick Signup ]
[ Lost Password ]

January 10 07
131,497 Poems
Posted

I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

[ Angst Poetry ]
[ Cutters ]
[ Famous Poetry ]
[ Poetry Scams ]

FontSize:
[ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
It means a lot to them, as it does to you.