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    dots Submission Name: Somebodydots
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    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       This is about my friend whom I fell in love with but he has someone else. I still remained a faithful friend to him even though it hurts to realize that we can never be.


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    I see somebody walking towards me
    His eyes looking into mine
    Eyes that melted my heart away
    Yet I know it is not mine to keep

    I hear somebody talking to me
    His voice silencing mine
    He was talking about him, her and them
    Yet there is no mention of my name

    I feel somebody sitting beside me
    His shoulder touching mine
    His burdens pouring out like rain
    Yet those tears were not cried for me

    Still...

    I see somebody right in front of me
    I hear somebody calling out my name
    I feel somebody grasping my hand tight

    And that somebody is you.




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      yelling my name and it was not him..

    wondering about how hard it can be to be with some one and yet be not the 'one'

    fancy life stuff. some how the emotions does not seem to flow out all so well, its very constrained.

    | Posted on 2007-05-28 00:00:00 | by rawpot | [ Reply to This ]
      Sometimes in life, we have NO choice but to love the one you love from a distance. I can relate to that very well. A very good write.
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      unrequited love id hard to deal with.. and I hope you learn to move one so that you can hear someone else calling your name.
    the last part, what do you think of making it more fragmented?
    Still...
    you are
    Standing right in front of me,
    calling my name,
    grasping my hand tight.
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by mimi | [ Reply to This ]


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