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    dots Submission Name: love in lifedots
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    Author: poet09
    Elite Ratio:    3.8 - 157/162/122
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Love
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    dotslove in lifedots
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    if you love someone are you will to give up your entire self for them?




    Submitted on 2005-09-21 06:42:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      thanx for giving me your insight on what I need to do about this random thought!

    Also read some of my other submits and tell me how they make you feel and Just Keep it Real!
    | Posted on 2005-09-23 00:00:00 | by poet09 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you meant 'willing'. Onto this random thought... well, it's been thought of before millions of times, since the dawn of consciousness I would guess... it's a universal question that will always hold people in thrall.

    But I would like to ask you why you would give up your 'entire' self for someone? And how do you give yourself up?

    To me, two people give each other each other, nothing more. Love is unconditional and pure... but that doesn't mean that we submerge our personality in someone else. That is a form of insecurity, a type of psychic 'leeching' for want of a better word.

    What I'm saying is this: you have to be your own person, you can't be absorbed by the one you love. That isn't love. It isn't equal. It's give and take, cause and effect blah blah blah... I'm sure you've heard all of this before.

    This question was a funny one, that's all. I just don't believe in what you were getting at. We can symbiotically entwine with another soul on an empathic level, but we can never give ourselves up to fully meld as we are individuals.

    I do know what you are getting at, but still...I suppose this could be taken different ways. I just told you the way that I saw this question asked of the reader. Perhaps you could word it slightly differently to get your message across clearer. Unless this is your exact message.

    Well, this was my opinion out of a sea of billions. Which doesn't mean jack lol.
    Have a good one.
    Peace,

    Jase
    | Posted on 2005-09-21 00:00:00 | by alteredlife | [ Reply to This ]


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